IELTS Writing Task 1: Pie Chart

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the U.S.A spent and received in 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Answer: As always, I’ll abstain from giving you an answer. Rather I’ll prefer to give you the structure along with some hints on how to proceed. Please write your own answer and email it to us at eltecielts@gmail.com

Okay. Let us first work on introduction. Here’s a sample on how to write a good introduction.

“The given pie-charts present information on sources as well as amount of revenue and expenditure of a charity in the United States of America for year 2007.”

Coming to the body paragraphs, we should write one paragraph on each pie-chart.

Body Paragraph 1: Revenue. (50 – 60 words)

Biggest source: Donated food

Followed by: Community contributions, program revenue, investment income, government grants. (‘Other’ always comes at the end)

Most students have little idea of how to use numbers given in the question while writing answers. Well, all you have to do is write ACTIVE voice and a MODIFIER. The voice will take care of everything. For instance:

“Donated food, the biggest source of revenue (modifier), contributed to 86.6% to the charity’s income.” (Active voice)

{Note: We’ve used different words to express same idea. Revenue = Income}

Body Paragraph 2: Expenditure (50 – 60 words)

Biggest Source: Program Services

Followed by: Fund Raising, Management and General.

Finally, please note that the charity is left with $ 336,684 surplus at the end of the year. Please use that to create one line conclusion.

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6 Comments

  1. zeebrah (@zeebrah1989)

    The given pie charts represent how much money a children’s charity situated in the USA yielded and expended in 2007. The causes are also revealed and determined in percentage.

    In general, Donated food was the major source of earnings which contributed almost 87% of the charity’s income, whereas program services, as the lead, accumulated almost 96% of the expenditures. Despite, these numbers, the charity in fact made a total profit of 336,684 US dollars from the total revenue of 53,561,580 dollars minus the total expenditure of 53,224,996 dollars.

    As to detailing other sources of revenue, community contributions collected just above 10% of the total income, followed by program revenue with just over 2%. Other sources of income only generated 0.4%, leaving both government grants and investment income with measly 0.2% each.

    With regards to expenditures, fundraising consumed almost 3% of the charity’s outflow. Finally, only 1.6 % was taken by the management and general.

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    1. Sartaj Singh

      Zeebrah,

      Money yield is not a synonym for revenue. Please use either REVENUE or INCOME. What causes? There are sources of revenue, no causes. Here’s a basic rule of any literature:

      One paragraph – One theme.

      Your body paragraph 1 has several themes – revenue, expenditure, profit. SA suggested structure is:

      Para 1: Introduction
      Para 2: Revenue
      Para 3: Expenditure
      Para 4: Profit (Conclusion)

      I guess you’ll score 6.5 bands with this answer. For 7+ bands, you need better sentence structure and better essay structure. Good Luck!

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  2. hazel

    The pie charts show the sources as well as income and expenditure incurred on charity in the United states of America for year 2007. At a first glance, Donated food accounted for highest source of revenue. On the other hand, program services accounted for greatest source of outgoing.

    It can be clearly seen that Donated food contributed 86.6% of income which was the highest proportion of revenue, followed by second most was community contribution i.e 10.4%. Other revenue sources contributed just small fraction of amount comprised of total 3%.

    In contrast, the largest proportion of spending was on program services which was around 95 per cent of total
    outgoing. while nearly 5% expenditure incurred on fundraising and management and general.

    in conclusion, total expenditure i.e 53,224,896 dollars can be made easily from total revenue i.e 53,561,580 dollars as children charity left with 336,684 surplus at the end of the year.

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    1. Sartaj Singh

      Corrections and comments are in BRACKETS ().

      The pie charts show the sources as well as income and expenditure incurred on charity (It’s a single charity organization) in the United states (States) of America for (the) year 2007. At a first glance, Donated (donated) food accounted for (the) highest source of revenue. On the other hand, program services accounted for (the) greatest source of outgoing.

      It can be clearly seen that Donated (donated) food contributed 86.6% of income, (COMMA) which was the highest proportion of revenue, followed by second most was (No need of “second most was”) community contribution i.e (i.e is not formal English. Avoid it.) 10.4%. Other revenue sources contributed just (a) small fraction of (the) amount comprised of total 3% (Better say: 3% of total).

      (NOTE: “Donated food” is repeated twice – intro and body para 1)

      In contrast, the largest proportion of spending was on program services, (COMMA) which was (were: program services are plural) around 95 per cent of (the) total outgoing while nearly 5% expenditure (was) incurred on fundraising and management and general.

      in (In) conclusion, total expenditure i.e (i.e is not formal English. Avoid it.) 53,224,896 dollars can be made easily from total revenue i.e 53,561,580 dollars as children charity left with 336,684 surplus at the end of the year.

      (Total repeated several times. This leads to redundancy. Prefer similar words such as entire outgoing, whole outgoing, aggregate revenue, etc)

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