A Student’s answer correction:
The illustration shows how chocolate is produced.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
20 minutes, 150 words at least.
147 words. A well-written answer. Very few mistakes. Could have written better with some rephrasing. I’ve given examples below. BANDS: 7.0
The diagram explains the process of chocolate production. Overall, it can be seen that there are a total of ten stages of producing the chocolate, beginning with their (What does “their” refer to? Chocolate? Chocolate does not grow on cocoa trees.) growth on the trees and ending up with production process of the chocolate.
Rephrase in one sentence: The given diagram explains the process of chocolate manufacturing in ten stages from the growth of ripe red pods on cocoa trees to the production of liquid chocolate.
First of all, the cacao trees are grown in South America and Africa continents and Indonesia. Once the pods are ripe and red, they are harvested and the white cacao beans are extracted from it.
After the fermentation
process of the beans, they are then placed onto on a large tray so that they can dry under the sun. Next, the dried beans are put in the large sacks and transported by train or lorry to the factory. Subsequently, they are roasted at a temperature 350 C° degree Celsius, then the beans are crushed and separated from their outer shell. Finally, the liquid chocolate is produced by pressing the inner part.
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