Developed nation should take more refugees from poorer countries Do you agree or disagree?
IELTS: 40 minutes, 250 words at least.
PTE: 20 minutes, 200 to 300 words.
It is argued that wealthy countries should accept more refugees from developing states. This essay
agree agrees (Subject-Verb Agreement: Essay = Singular; use “agrees”) with this statement because they have a moral obligation to do so and they can afford to help those in need.
Read my article on SUBJECT-VERB agreement HERE.
Please Note: Some teachers/ books may suggest writing “this essay agrees”. I do not. Directly day “I agree.”
Moreover, you could have used a “Not only X, but also Y” construction. The sentence would look like: “I agree with this view because not only can they afford helping those in need, but also they have a moral obligation.”
Poorer countries are undeveloped, (A comma is always recommended before an “”AND”. That’s an OXFORD comma. For more read my article HERE.) and the
citizen citizens of those countries are under below the poverty line (Article usage.).
There are various
cause causes to be the poor country like geographical situation, natural disasters, civil war and so on. As a result, a citizen of that country starts to leave the native country (Article usage problem). Developed state states have (state – has; states – have) a responsibility to help such poorer countries.
You could have written this better: “A country can be poor due to several reasons ranging from geographical location and natural disasters to civil war and colonial lineage. Consequently, the citizens of that country are forced to migrate in order to escape poverty and hunger.”
They can settle the refugee camp on their land and provide basic needs to the refugees
in relation of humanitarian as a humanitarian gesture. Wealthy nation plays nations play (you’ve used plural above: Developed states, they. Can’t switch to singular here.) a vital role to maintain peace and prosperity throughout the world. For example, (need a comma here) a recent research shows that about 40 percent population of Syria lives in different neighbors neighbouring countries.
Wealthy nations can afford to take refugees. They also have an ability and capacity to provide services to the refugees. If poor nations cannot handle the situation of issues (Unclear; what do you mean by “Situation of issues”?) appeared in countries, developed countries should help to minimize the problems. For instance: a recent study shows that the developed nations like the United States, United Kingdom
has have allocated about 20 percent budget for the poorer countries to help them.
In conclusion, As having a relation (what relation?) developed nation should take more
refugee refugees from the poorer nation nations. They have a moral obligation to save the life and provide basic needs to every humanitarian human. Similarly, wealthy state states have the capacity to help the poor countries so they have to co-operate with poorer nation to solve the problem.
A lot of issues need to be addressed in your answer. You have not used subject-verb, singular-plurals, articles correctly. Please follow the relevant links to improve your writing.
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