IELTS Academic Task 1: Destination of the U.K Graduates and Post-Graduates.

Checking a student’s answer:

These charts give data on the destination of U.K graduates and post-graduates (excluding full-time work) for the year 2008.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The both bar charts illustrate the information regarding destination of the United Kingdom graduates as well as post- graduates who were engaged in full-time toil (What do you mean by “Full-time toil”) for the 2008 year during 2008.

Overall, clearly, both graduates and post-graduates pupils were not interested in voluntary works. However, they were like to do preferred further education.

In the case of graduates novice (What do you mean by graduate novice? Not clear.), By 2008 (No need to repeat the year again. You’ve already mentioned it in the intro.), in the UK, counting of graduates students were approximately 17735 in part – time work as compared to voluntary work (17735 graduates in part-time work were not in comparison to something else. That’s an absolute number), which was only 3500.

Rephrase: While 17735 graduates were engaged in part-time work, only 3500 were interested in voluntary jobs.

The maximum number of learners (Graduates are graduates. Please don’t squeeze a synonym where none exists.) graduates were in further education (“Which” links education to 29665. Is education = 29665 or graduates = 29665?) which are just over 29665.

Rephrase: 29665 graduates, the largest among the four groups, opted further education.

While, on the other hand, left students were 16235 in unemployment. More than 16000 graduates were unemployed during the given year.

Regarding the numbers of post-graduates, the most numbers of observers (Who are observers? Didn’t see that in the question.) were in both fields, graduates as well as post-graduates (is this about post-graduates or both graduates and post-graduates? Not clear.), in further study, which were near about 2726. Whereas, only 365 pupils were interested in voluntary toil jobs and 1625 students were in unemployment unemployed in 2008 in the country of the united kingdom.

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