IELTS Essay Correction: English More Important Than Local Languages – 2

English Language IELTS PTE

Checking a student’s essay.

Learning English at school is often seen more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion is it important to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages, if so how?

40 minutes, 250 words.

Here is my answer (with structure) on this topic.

Another student has attempted this answer HERE.

Please go through an 8 band response as well.

IELTS, as well as PTE, love asking questions on the English language. Here is my essay on English as Global Business Language.

There once was a time when local languages dominated the world. Every tribe communicated in their its (Every = Singular; their = plural. Wrong pronoun) own dialect and communication conversation (avoid word repetition – communication) was easier. With globalization, English has become a central language and many people strive to learn it so as to mingle well in the international community. While fluency in the English Language prepares one for a better corporate life, it leaves local languages at risk of extinction. (Introduction is well written)

On one hand, English is the most common language in the world. Parents and teachers start at an early stage of a child’s life to prepare him prepare children at a young age (IELTS and PTE love brevity (concise writing): Use fewer words to communicate without losing meaning. Instead of 12, now we have 6 words while keeping the idea intact.) for a life beyond his immediate environment and this is done by teaching the child English which is the generally globally accepted language. In my country, though there are many tribes with different languages, English is the formal means of communication. The consequence of this is that everyone must communicate in English no matter your tribeConsequently, every tribe, irrespective of its identity, uses the English language for inter-tribal communication. This promotes national unity and harmony. (Benefits of English language) 

On the other hand, while English is gaining a lot of prominence, values of local languages are lost and this subjects it them (Languages = plural; it = singular. Wrong pronoun usage.) to a risk of fading away.

It is through local languages that people who have lived a major part of their lives outside their local environment find their origin. You could have expressed this idea better to explain that local languages must be protected. Rephrase: Local languages, like local food, folk dance, music, and history, create a human being’s identity. Losing local language and dialects to a single global language will eliminate human diversity and identity.

In conclusion, it can be seen that the importance of both English and local languages cannot be over emphasized. Having a balance of the two makes one to adapt more in the society.

230 words. Please ask any doubts in the comments box below. Good luck.

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5 thoughts on “IELTS Essay Correction: English More Important Than Local Languages – 2

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