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IELTS Essay Correction: Global Warming – Causes and Solutions.

climate change IELTS PTE

Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Please go through my answer as well.

Nowadays, the world is suffering from a global warming and this is considered one of the most danger dangerous problems in our universe. Thus this essay will illustrate the causes of this issue and solutions that individuals and governments should be taken to solve this big matter. (Please go through any of my essay articles to study How to write an introduction – MENTION the causes.)

To begin, there are a lot of things that lead to increase the temperature of the earth and make a global warming. One of these things is the increase in the number of manufactories manufacturing units in the developed countries, especially in Europe, that depend on gasoline and other sources of energies energy (sources may be multiple, but energy is energy. No plural here.) to switch run their machines. Unfortunately, more than fifty percent of these sources of energies energy (sources are not lost, energy is lost) are is lost as a heat in the air.

Another cause of raising the degree of temperature is a significant increase of cars in our universeCars as a dominant mode of transport are also contributing to the global warming.

Although these cars may solve problems of transportation, they produce a lot of smokes in the earth that induce warming pollution and greenhouse gases that trap Sun’s infrared light to increase atmospheric temperature. Furthermore, increasing the number of devices used in our home may cause a slight increase in universe slightly raise Earth’s temperature.

So solutions to this issue should be occurred by the responsible authorities (PASSIVE VOICE. Prefer ACTIVE VOICE) and individuals in every country to preserve our planet for harmful effects of this problem and to live a safe life. Governments, as well as individuals across the world, need to unite to find a solution to this problem and preserve our planet from the harmful impacts of global warming.

One solution is to put formulate and implement rules that decrease the heat of emitted from the manufactories and another one is to decrease the number of cars in the street on the road. The most important solution of to this huge issue is to decrease the number of devices, such as microwave devices, air conditioners, and water heatersin the at home that involved in warming generate heat, such as microwave devices, air conditioners and water heaters. Such as should always be connected to the word it exemplifies. In this case, it gives examples of DEVICES and not WARMING.

In conclusion, it is important to decrease the temperature of our planet because increases its temperature may lead to ice melt and increase water and finally sink our planet. The planet won’t sink but our houses will. 

Suggestions: You need to work on the following areas:

  1. Writing introduction.
  2. Writing conclusion.
  3. Articles.
  4. Prepositions.
  5. Active Voice.
  6. Sentence Structure.

Feel free to ask any question on tenses, singular-plural, articles, has/have, restructuring, etc. in the comments box below.

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7 responses

  1. In recent times, the issue of global warming has been widely discussed topic among environmentalists, journalists and the general public. While it is widely known that the activities of man such as bush burning, gas flaring and coal mining are the major reasons of global warming, research is still ongoing about possible causes and solutions.
    When the ozone layer covering the atmosphere is depleted, the earth receives direct heat of the sun. Not only does the atmospheric temperature increases as a result of global warming, ice melts and also land and aquatic organisms die. A global survey conducted in 2012 stated that in order to prevent global rise in temperature, man must protect the environment and end frequent deforestation.
    The United Nations held a meeting on January 2017, and it was resolved that countries must put a ceiling on the volume of gases flared annually. This can be effectively be implemented by increasing the tax paid by oil companies whenever they flare gas. Though this came as a good resolution, it was opposed by major oil and gas producing countries on the grounds that they will run into deficit if such is implemented.
    Global concern is still mounting up and it is estimated that if the current rate of atmospheric temperature increase is continued, that life may cease to exist on earth.
    In conclusion, to sustain life on earth, human activities must be watched. Once this is done, there will be a drastic drop on global warming and life on earth will be assured.

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  4. thank you for rapid response,
    I wonder you that repeating the same mistake will decrease the score more.
    and I want to know in which band I am

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    • I can give 6.0 bands to this essay. Remember, even 9.0 bands answers have mistakes. If you miss a preposition or make a spelling mistake, you won’t be penalized. However, making same mistakes more than once establishes the fact that your English is weak. Consequently, you will be penalized for repeating the mistakes.

      Best Wishes.

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