IELTS Essay Correction: Animal Testing for Cosmetics and Drugs.

 

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Testing on animals is a common practice for products such as cosmetics or drugs. Some people regard testing on animals as completely wrong and inhumane and they believe it should not be allowed. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Please go through the similar IELTS Essay topic: Animal Rights.

Certain individual believe individuals believe (Subject-Verb Disagreement) that mankind should not use animals for their purpose because animals also have an equal right to live in this world. But However, others argue that humans are more important than animals so. Consequently, to save human life lives, animals have to sacrifice their life to cure research and testing on animals should be conducted. This essay partly agrees with this statement.

We can see that body parts of animals are used for different cosmetic purposes to revive the beauty of human humans. Such as For example, the skin of animals is used to make leather shoes and belts, while bones are used for the rings and bracelets and so on. Similarly, animals are tested in at the laboratory to find the solution of different uncommon diseases afflicting humans for curing human beings. It is easier to test the animals better than to risk life of a human in the lab.

Human beings are valuable living beings who have an innate capacity to change the world so to save life, it can be appropriate to use animals. For instance: a recent research paper shows that about 80 percent of medicine are produced and distributed in market after the test in animals. (Really? Are humans really more important than other animals?)

However, some animal right activists deny to test oppose testing on animals because they argue animals also have right as much as human have to live in the world. They also have families and can share their feeling and emotions. For example, a research accomplished by Harvard University shows that animals can understand (Understand what?) and want to stay with beloved one and share love and affection. At the end, animal right campaigners suggest not to exploit animals and search for the alternative.

In conclusion, although animals are used for manufacturing cosmetic materials or to save the life of a human, animals also have right to live together in family and utilize the beauty of the environment. So I partly agree to use animals for the purpose of human. (Need not write this again. You’ve mentioned this in the introduction)

Several Mistakes: Articles (a, an, the); Subject-Verb Disagreement.

Try to use better words: However, Consequently, Afflict. Try using WHILE construction. While X, Y. 

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