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The following pie charts are on the share of world wide web browsers used for accessing the internet.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
20 minutes, 150 words at least.
Please go through my answer HERE.
The two graphs illustrate the proportion of various web browsers in the world to access the internet in two years
(2001 and 2010) Mention any one format.
Overall, most of the browsers increased their percentage while only Internet Explorer decreased (Internet Explorer didn’t decrease, its usage/share decreased.) over the period of 9 years. Firefox was the most used web browser more in recent years, whereas, Opera was the least.
Initially, Internet Explorer was the most preferred browser with nearly 75 percent market share in 2001, but it‘s share nearly halved in 2010. Firefox overtook the
latter (which browser is latter? There’s no reference.) in the last year by increasing to approximately 20 (?? Increase was 15%, from 22 to 37) percent. Rephrase: During this period, Firefox increased its market share by 15 percent and replaced the Internet Explorer as a dominant player.
In regards to the remaining web browsers, the most significant change can be seen in Chrome which comprised of a percent and 15.5 percent in 2001 and 2010, respectively. Opera doubled its value to 4.2 percent. Safari began with an insignificant number and ended to 4.9 percent in 2010.
Well-written. However, you need a few sentence structure changes. You have followed a different structure than the one I followed. You’ve preferred to structure paragraphs on BROWSERS and not YEARS. That’s fine.
Bands: 6.5. You need to write complete sentences to score 7.0. (Not missing words like “Market Share” for instance.)
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