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IELTS Task 2 (PTE Writing): Health Education and Preventative Measures.

health and preventive care IELTS PTE

“Prevention is better than cure.” Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. Do you agree or disagree?

IELTS: 40 minutes, 250 words at least.

PTE: 20 minutes, 200 to 300 words.

Answer:

Please go through a related essay as well: Medical Care and Life Expectancy.

Introduction: (Introduce the topic, state your opinion, MENTION the reasons that you’ll EXPLAIN in the body.)

In an era of escalating medical costs, most of which are borne by the already burdened state exchequer, the issues of health education and prevention of diseases are more important than ever before. I believe that governments should divert a significant proportion of their health budgets to creating awareness on preventative measures since these are not only less costly than curing a disease but also keep people more productive.

Body Paragraph 1: (Reason 1: less costly)

With a rapid increase in population, deterioration of lifestyle and advancements in medical technology humans can be saved from any life threatening condition. However, the budget deficits of almost all countries have spiked during the past five decades primarily due to increase in the cost of medical care. Reducing the need of such care can significantly curtail the government’s expenditure. For instance, an experiment in the United States revealed that creating awareness through advertisements on benefits of a healthy diet reduced a state’s total health expenditure by more than 20 percent.

Body Paragraph 2: (Reason 2: More productive)

Moreover, health education in community centers and advertising preventative measures such as a healthy diet enable a person to stay productive. Though a person can be cured of a disease in a hospital, that person is never again as productive as he was earlier. On an average, it takes more than a year for a person to gain full health and productivity after an operation. Consequently, it is better to create awareness on benefits of a healthy lifestyle than cure a disease.

Conclusion: (Conclude the topic with FUTURE and IMPACT)

Health education and preventative measures can significantly reduce the budgetary spending, and fix the broken and bloated health care systems of various countries such as the United States. They also have the potential to add economic productivity increasing the wealth of a nation. 

286 words.

Here is a correction to a student’s answer on this topic.

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4 responses

  1. It is a popular saying that “Health is wealth” but in recent times, countries, mainly undeveloped countries, see healthcare as a burden that should be given less attention. On the other hand, developed nations work toward achieving a standard healthcare system. Consequently, developed nations have been engaged in proactive measures by educating the citizens on healthy living.
    The undeveloped nations believe that there are more important national issues to tackle instead of healthcare. While they may be right in a way, there is also need for them to create a balance between other national issues and health infrastructure. As reported in a global survey conducted by the United Nations Health Team, it was observed that the mortality rate of citizens in undeveloped countries are very high as against that of the developed countries. While responding to questions as to why that was so, the team leader of the survey, Ms. Walter, stated that the undeveloped nations neglected the core aspect of healthy living which is health education.
    On the other hand, developed nations have taken the giant step into making sure that their citizens are educated formally and informally about health. In the syllabus of many European schools, health education has been made mandatory and the government is spending a whole lot to make sure that this process is sustained.
    Health education not only elongates human life but also creates a tension free society. It is therefore incumbent on every government to channel enough resources on the subject so as to ensure that citizens lead a better life.

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