Correcting a student’s answer.
The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
20 minutes, 150 words at least.
The given table shows data
of on expenditures of consumers on various items in five countries (Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey) in the year 2002. (Avoid parenthesis in IELTS.)
Overall, food, drinks, and tobacco were the most significant
source of (there’s no source of spending. There are sources of income, sources of information.) spending in all countries, whereas, leisure and education were the least (This sentence could have been better structured). Turkey spent most money among the remaining countries.
with to foods, drinks, and cigarettes, Turkey used nearly a third (of what?), while Ireland disbursed approximately 30 percent (of what?). Italy’s consumption was slightly higher than Sweden’s by an insignificant percentage.
Italy, with 9 percent of total expenses, consumed more money in clothing and footwear than the other countries
with exactly 9 percent. Used money was evidently least in leisure and education category with the highest percentage of 4.35 in Turkey and lowest in Spain with roughly 2 percent. (These sentences are badly structured. You have not INTEGRATED the data in the language.)
There are some structural issues, both at sentence and paragraph level, that need to be addressed. Words = 122. Too short of the target number of words.
Bands = 6.0.
Please feel free to ask any questions in the comments section.