IELTS Academic Task 1 Correction: Energy Production.

Correcting a student’s answer:

The following pie charts are the comparison of energy production from various sources in France. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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20 minutes, 150 words.

Answer:

The two piechart pie charts provide information about the comparison of five kinds sources of energy product France from the year in 1995 and 2005.

Overall, at the beginning of the period during both years coal is the most significant source of in energy production. While other sources shows least in percentage have the smallest share in of energy production (Incomplete While construction. While X, Y). In contrast, at the end of the period, coal is highest in energy production while other energy production shows smallest in percentage.

Never use special symbols such as % in IELTS or PTE exam. Always write proper English language: Percent.

In terms of coal, the energy production in the year of 1995 is about 29.80% and experienced experiences (Tenses. You’ve used present tense earlier and suddenly switched to the past tense.) a slight increase in 2005. The energy production of gas is about 29.63% at the beginning of the period and shows as significant rise in 2005, which (Bad construction. Which modifies the work it is linked to. here it modifies 2005) is about 30.31%. … and in 2005 it witnesses a significant increase to 30.31 percent.

The other and Nuclear energy production shows least sector (???? contribution, share, etc.), which is about 4.90% and 6.40% and in the year of 2005, the nuclear and the other energy production increased increases (tenses mismatch) rapidly which is about 9.10% & 10.10%.

On the other hand, the petro energy production in 1995 shows the highest proportion in beginning of the period. Whereas, in the year of ????, petro energy production is the least in proportion (Well, there’s no PROPORTION here. Only Percentages).

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