IELTS July 2017 Task 2: Success is About Hard Work or Money?

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Some people believe that success is about hard work and determination. Others think that success has a connection with money and personal appearance. Discuss both views. Give your opinion and some of your own experiences.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Please go through a similar essay: Influence of a region on success.

Introduction: (Introduce the topic and state your OPINION. Remember, this essay statement has already MENTIONED the reasons supporting each opinion – hard work vs money. Your job is easy. Just EXPLAIN in the body paragraphs.)

Success is a much-discussed topic. While some people believe that hard work, commitment, and persistence are the key to success in life, others think that family background and physical attributes are more important. I believe that both views are partly valid. We need a combination of personal commitment and finance to become successful.

Body Paragraph 1: (View 1: Hard Work and Determination)

Without working hard, nobody has ever achieved any goal. To accomplish a task a person needs to consistently put efforts and become a master in that subject. Regularly working at a task makes it second nature to us. For instance, Sachin Tendulkar, the master batsman from India and Donald Bradman, the Australian cricketer, worked hard on playing cricket since childhood and were dedicated to the sport to the exclusion of everything else.

Body Paragraph 2: (View 2: Money and Personal Appearance)

Financial power and physical traits play an equally important role. Humans, unconsciously, are slaves of their biases. We follow our preconceived notions without realizing it. For example, in most job interviews, African Americans are not as easily selected as people with lighter skin tones. This is often attributed to the human preference for people of white skin. Moreover, those with more wealth have superior contacts and greater resources at their disposal to learn new skills. This makes them better candidates for high-paid jobs.

Conclusion: (Conclude the essay with FUTURE and/ or IMPACT)

In conclusion, both hard work and money play an important role in an individual’s success. I believe that governments and institutions should make efforts to reduce the role of money and provide equal opportunities to everyone irrespective of his financial status and physical appearance.

252 words.

Please feel free to ask any questions in the comments section.

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4 Comments

  1. Yasser

    According to many academic writing books, when we discuss two views, we state our view at the end of the essay. In other words, we mention our opinion in the conclusion. But you mentioned your opinion in the introduction and that would be similar to agree or disagree essays. One of the difference between them is to mention your opinion after you discuss both views while the other one you mention your position clearly in the introduction.

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    1. Sartaj Singh

      Well, there’s nothing wrong in stating your opinion in the introduction. It is not same as the Agree/ Disagree essay since the body paragraphs still contain BOTH VIEWS and not an explanation of my opinion. Thank you for raising the issue.

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