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IELTS Essay Correction: English More Important Than Local Languages – 3.

English Language IELTS PTE

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at a risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

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Student Essay 1

Student Essay 2

A concern exists globally about the domination of English over other native languages at the schooling level. This leads to the decreased usage of local dialects and risks their obliteration. In my opinion, English should be promoted as a worldwide language, however, efforts at the government level should be made to promote other languages too. (I like this introduction)

On the one hand, English is already the most commonly spoken tongue in the world as most of the countries have people who can read and write it. Subsequently, trade relations, which are closed closely linked to the political relations between nations(a Comma) can be facilitated as the barriers to conversations are decreased. For example – A recent study by the world bank World Bank showed better trade relations among regions of the world which speak the same dialect language (dialects are within the same language). This illustrates the conducive nature of a common shared (common repeated again in the next sentence) tongue. Furthermore, individuals who have the same first language also tend to share common beliefs thus helping create a more homogenous world.

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On the other hand, native languages and tradition are extremely important in preserving the unique identity of a nation. Therefore, taking care that this heritage is held in value and passed on to subsequent generations is a responsibility that the present generation has. Language has a pivotal role in this. Therefore, (word repetition) steps have to be taken by the state to protect their dialect local/ vernacular languages. Firstly, states can make their language compulsory at the primary education level. Secondly, they can promote further reading by starting new post graduate courses, as this ensures the survival of their tongue. (Article usage)

To conclude, the future generations will have a more closely knit world due to advances in communication, so a common language internationally will enhance trade and cultural sharing. However, this should not come at cost of loss of centuries old dialects as this will numb the uniqueness that the world prides upon.

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