IELTS Essay Correction: Should Homework be Given to Children?

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Some people believe that no homework should be given to children. Others, however, say extra work is needed after school for children and teenagers in order to succeed. Discuss both views and give your opinion including reasons and examples.

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Answer:

Education is proven to be a the gateway to success, butHowever, at times, some obturate (This is a VERB that you’ve used as a NOUN. Please don’t use such words. This will cost you bands.) like homework can deteriorate that gate. As a result, a majority of people consider that children should be abstained abstain from homework. However, others majorities opine that some extra task should be provided to children and teenagers to make them successful. I will explain these two opinions with some examples. (This is obvious that you’ll explain both opinions. This is the question. Redundancy.)

Firstly, sometimes homework impedes children from indulging into creative activities. Often, Children find it harder to digest the tasks when it is piled up. It may also cause them to lose interest in studies. For example, in India, the schools operate for 6 or 7 hours(add a comma before which) which can be very hectic at times. They come back tired and fall asleep, which does not allow them to get enough time to develop a sense of socialization socialize, i.e, that is (never use contractions or short forms) to get into a healthy relationship with their peers. Moreover, it might also affect their health mentally and as well as physically.

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On the contrary, some researchers suggest that homework does help children and adolescents in accentuating their interests and knowledge in subjects. There are always few students who are not studious and hence, they need a proper guidance. This is where homework plays a core role; It keeps them in touch with the syllabus. For example, I am very repulsive towards French Literature but, my subject teacher provides us with homework(comma before which) which enables me to score a good mark in that particular subject though I am not good at it well. (Rest is redundant)

To conclude, while at first, it might seem that tasks should not be given to children, but we cannot simply ignore the importance of homework. Thus, I would say that homework must be given to kids as well as to teenagers but in an ample a manageable (ample = too much) amount, it should not so that it does not hinder their other interests in life and it should also allow them to foster a healthy mind and a body without demanding much of their precious time.

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