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You rented a house from a rental company. The air conditioner has stopped working. You phoned the company a week ago but it still has not been repaired.
- introduce yourself
- explain the situation
- say what action you would like to company to take.
I am a resident of 43, Whitehall Close which was recommended by you (Passive Voice. Use Active.) as I have taken your services for finding this accommodation. (I took your services about a month ago to find the apartment I am living in currently.)
Actually, last week, coolant system
has (Wrong tense. Use past tense.) stopped working. So, as a result, Consequently, I and my family my family and I have to suffer a lot owing to hot summer days. You could have merged the two sentences to create one complex sentence. Unfortunately, the apartment’s coolant system stopped working last week, and my family and I have been spending the hot summer days in utter misery (suffering). It is really giving miserable wet to us. (Explain your misery in a greater detail – which family member suffers from which problem?) Consequently, my wife and I can not cook food in our kitchen without drenching our clothes in sweat. My father, who suffers from a heart disease and needs an appropriate temperature to maintain his health, has seen a rapid increase in his blood pressure. My daughter’s grade 10 exams are just a week away and she can not concentrate on her studies due to extreme heat in the house.
We are not able to relax at home as it is a pre-requisite of us in summer days.
For making you aware of this issue, I called you seven days ago but unfortunately, any
kinda kind of service was not availed (Passive voice. Prefer Active). I am really very disappointed by this with the problem as well as your response.
Therefore, I want quick service from your side for removing the glitch. I hope you will consider my problem seriously.
which will make me grateful ultimately.
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