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IELTS PTE Reading Comprehension:

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Amazon Forests PDF: Please click on the link below to download the reading comprehension file. The file contains 13 questions (A to M). You can either answer them on the file or give answers in the comments box below.

I’ll soon write the answers in the comments section below. Please read the passage in 20 minutes and answer the 13 questions before checking.

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Best wishes.

Reading Passage Amazon Forests

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IELTS Essay August 2017: Travel Necessary to Learn About Other Nations – 1.

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Some people think that travel is necessary to learn about other nations. Others, however, think that TV and the Internet are the best ways to learn about other countries. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Please read the sample answer as well.

Please go through a similar essay for the PTE Exam.

Undoubtedly, tourism is a significant method for knowing the world closely. Some individuals believe that journeys are obligatory to learn other countries cultures, lifestyles, and history while opponents others think that television and social sites the Internet are superior means to understand about abroad other countries(41 words. Just fine. Try mentioning reasons that you plan to explain the body paragraphs.)

On the one hand, a person, who wants to experience the real beauty of other nations’ unique places such as historical buildings and monuments, and understand their culture (Implement Parallelism correctly), (Modifier) must visit of a the country  personally is mandatory for that individual.

Understand modifiers.

A person, who wants to experience the real beauty of other nations’ unique places such as historical buildings and monuments, and understand their culture, must visit the country personally. Modifier article.

Travel is not only limited for enables learning about a knowing particular nation, but also helps in confidence building (Parallelism, again), and dealing with real-life situations (Restructure the sentence to include the final part within not only ….., but also….). Furthermore, while traveling, traveler catch’s catches many original and unforgettable views vividly in photographs and sweet memories in own mind as well as capture in photos form(78 words. Excellent length.)

On the other hand, By watching videos, movies, and various television channels that are broadcasting on television is also a great way to learn about foreign countries. This method is for those individuals who want to visit or know about nations, however, they have do not have enough time and money. Though it saves a person‘s time and income, but he does is not able to view the original beauty of other nations. Instead of this, he can see only those views that are sometime sometimes animated or listen to wrong information that created at the of shooting places ??. Moreover, he cannot experience those obstacles that come occur during traveling and give design real-life solutions to tackle with problems. (107 words.)

To conclude, both the ways of grabbing knowledge have their own significance. It all depends on a person’s interest as well as ability. In addition, the government is also providing many facilities such as low rate of fare price fares to tourists and laws for the their protection of them(43 words. Perfect length.)

Words = 269. Bands = 6.0.

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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1: Agricultural​ Production and Consumption in Canada.

The first pie-chart is on agricultural consumption while the latter is on production in Canada in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Answer:

The given pie-charts present information on agricultural production and consumption of various food categories such as meat, dairy, oilseeds, cereals, fruits, vegetables, tea, coffee and tobacco in Canada in the year 2014. (Introduction)

Before writing, let us structure the answer into two parts. Devote one paragraph to production and another to consumption. 

The Canadians mostly consume dairy items followed by red meat. Accounting for the 2 percent intake of eggs and poultry, and 7 percent consumption of dairy in their diet, the Canadians consume 39 percent animal products. Fruits and vegetables constitute 20 percent of the Canadian diet, while coffee and tea account for 7 percent only. (Consumption)

Of the total agricultural production in Canada, animal products account for the largest share of 53 percent. These are followed by vegetables and fruits, which account for 18 percent share. Only 11percent of total production goes to cereals while 10 percent production goes to tea, coffee, and tobacco. Oilseeds constitute only about 8 percent of the total production. (Production)

145 words.

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IELTS Essay Task 2 Correction: People Watch Similar Films, Advertisements, Music And Fashion – 2.

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Nowadays people from different countries watch and enjoy similar films, advertisements, music, and fashion. Do you agree or disagree? What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Please go through the sample answer as well. Here’s another student’s answer.

As, we are in the dawn of an era of globalization which provides a common platform to flourish similar films, advertisements, music, and fashion (With As this sentence is incomplete). I certainly agree that it has advantages as an equal opportunity of economic development for all the countries. However, it has drawbacks such as people are loosing  losing the charm and beauty of their enriched culture and they are moving towards the glamorous and oblivious western world. (75 words. A bit long introduction.)

One the one hand, people from different walks of life are enjoying the similar films, advertisements, music, and fashion which provide an enormous growth to their lifestyle lifestyles and a phenomenal growth in the GDP (Rules of parallelism violated). For instance, India is a developing country and the western trend is very (don’t use very with significantly) significantly welcomed throughout the country. Moreover, it has been observed that people who follow the western world are more economically financially (word repetition: economic) sound and progressive in nature which leads to the economic development. (75 words.)

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On the other hand, people are not consciously thinking about their ancient culture and traditions which have astonishingly deeper roots in the history. Nevertheless, this nuance development is seemingly eradicating the old religious believes beliefs with a new western mode influence.

For example, in India, all the metropolitan cities have been modernized with this occidental lifestyle which leads to the destruction of traditions and a clash of ideas which becomes the societal issues which provide the sparks to the religious conspiracies. (Poorly structured sentence. Too much usage of whichFor example, in India, all metropolitan cities have been modernized with occidental lifestyles leading to the destruction of traditions and a clash of ideas. This often sparks religious and ethnic conflicts.

(76 words.)

In conclusion, as the western world works on logic and reasoning which is are not the case with followed in other parts of the world (Incomplete sentence). Moreover, it is also essentially important to intact keep the traditions and cultural values intact. In future, the western world might be the new way of life. (44 words.)

Total Words = 270 words. Bands = 7.0. You can easily graduate to 8.0. Best Wishes.

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IELTS Writing Task 2 Correction: Friends Through Social Media – 1.

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Many people make friends through social sites and chat rooms. Others believe that it is not a good idea to make friends without meeting them face to face. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant examples.

IELTS: 40 minutes, 250 words at least.

PTE: 20 minutes, 200 to 300 words.

Answer:

Please go through the sample answer.

Advanced technology of social media is proliferated (Passive Voice. Use active.) in the world such as (Such as gives examples of the world, not social media. Wrong placement.) facebook, twitter, instagram, and WhatsApp. Many individuals are using these sites for exploring the world as well as making (Parallelism perfect) new friends, while opponents think it is a wrong method to make friends online because in some cases these sites would could be dangerous. (52 words. Perfect length. Good use of while construction.)

Firstly, social sites are beneficial for many people to make new friends not only in one’s own country but also from abroad. This helps in knowing a foreign culture through conversation with friends. Similarly, it helps a lot of that person who have has an introvert personality because he does not mix easily with other person people when he meets them face to face. For instance, these sites provides provide chat rooms if he does not want to talk directly such as as well as video call or voice call to avoid face-to-face conversations. He can use only messenger or chat room for conversation with a new friend. (90 words. Perfect length.)

Secondly, nowadays, by making new friends all over the world homemakers are establishing their business worldwide and it helps a lot in becoming financially strong. For example, these online sites world (or websites) provide buissness business pages for spreading buissness commerce everywhere which can help not only the businessmen but also in the national economy (Parallelism violated). (50 words.)

In contrast, some users make fake identity accounts or attractive accounts with advanced feature technology, after that they and start making new friends with wrong information identity, (repetition. You’ve written this earlier). (new sentence) then Then they blackmail to innocent people so that this is a worse method of making unknown friends (wrong usage of so that). For instance, in rare cases some terrorists make accounts, start explore students and (Parallelism violated) give offers to individuals and start mind-washing for their own purpose which would be harmful for to innocent people. Moreover, some individuals after becoming friends (this is a modifier. Place it in commas) they start harrassing harassing to next companion which is also totally disgusting thinking of some worse persons (Poor sentence structuring)(95 words.)

To conclude, making a new friend (or new friends) through online sites is not a bad idea because sometimes luckily we can make such a significant friend which who help helps us in our learning and buissness purposes. It is not harmful if we would use some features such as block the person when we feel a threat of some kind. (51 words. Perfect length. The conclusion is fine. Need to make it stronger)

Total Words = 338 words. Bands= 6.0

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IELTS Writing Task 2 (September 2017): Friends Through Social Media.

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Many people make friends through social sites and chat rooms. Others believe that it is not a good idea to make friends without meeting them face to face. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant examples.

IELTS: 40 minutes, 250 words at least.

PTE: 20 minutes, 200 to 300 words.

Answer:

Instead of writing an answer, let me present a structure and help you write better.

Introduction: The question statement presents two views. Since you’re supposed to write 40 to 50 words in the introduction (2 sentences), I’ll suggest writing an introductory sentence on friendship and/ or social media and the second sentence on your opinion (agree or disagree). Do not forget to mention the reasons supporting your opinion. Explain these in the body paragraphs.

Sample introduction:

“With the advancement of technologies such as smartphones and the Internet, people spend a lot of time on social media. Though some people believe in making friends only after a personal interaction, I strongly support the idea of making friends online since it is not only more convenient but also helps develop friendships with people from diverse backgrounds.” (58 words.)

Body Paragraph 2: Use this paragraph to EXPLAIN the reason 1 (Convenient) and try writing an example. Please write about 70 to 90 words – 4 to 5 sentences.

Body Paragraph 3: Use this paragraph to EXPLAIN the reason 2 (people from diverse backgrounds) along with an example. Please write about 70 to 90 words – 4 to 5 sentences.

Conclusion: Finally, it is time to write a powerful and scoring conclusion. Please make sure that the conclusion is not the same as an introduction. While the introduction is meant to convey the ideas that will be discussed in the body paragraphs, the conclusion is used to express ideas for the FUTURE. Conclusion, thus, goes beyond the essay topic. Please write a conclusion in about 40 to 50 words – 2 sentences.

Sample Conclusion:

“In conclusion, making friends on social media is an excellent way to network and gain insights about various cultures and countries. It is a convenient way to resolve international and inter-cultural conflicts, and create a sustainable society.” (37 words.)

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IELTS PTE Reading Comprehension: Earthquakes.

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Earthquake PDF: Please click on the link below to download the reading comprehension file. The file contains 13 questions (A to M). You can either answer them on the file or give answers in the comments box below.

I’ll soon write the answers in the comments section below. Please read the passage in 20 minutes and answer the 13 questions before checking.

You can separately request heading/ themes and keywords in the comments section.

Best wishes.

Reading Passage Earthquake

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IELTS Essay Task 2 Correction: People Watch Similar Films, Advertisements, Music And Fashion – 1.

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Nowadays people from different countries watch and enjoy similar films, advertisements, music, and fashion. Do you agree or disagree? What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Please read the sample answer as well. Here is a 7 bands response from another student.

It is undeniable Undeniably/ undoubtedly, that in recent years, people of different country countries follows follow the same interests in movies, advertisements, musics, and fashions. I agree with this statement because it plays a significant role to understand in understanding different country lifestyles and cultures. I write some merits and demerits of this development. Don’t write this. The examiner knows you will mention both advantages and disadvantages. (43 words.)

On the one hand, this growth of same likes build builds a sense that we live in the global world, which has no boundaries, people live freedomly freely and adopt new lifestyle fearlessly (parallelism violated. Which has A, B, and C. Discuss with me.). Firstly, individuals can learn vivid (languages are never vivid) languages, cultures from televisions. Various channels of countries broadcast regional channels of country in which they show their country local culture, music, and lifestyle (word repetition: country). It help helps other country people to foreigners understand another country native culture easily (too much country). Secondly, music also help helps to gain more knowledge about new vocabulary and pronunciation of different language sentences and phrases. Thirdly, Advertisements and fashions also put a large impact on people lives so that overwhelmingly individuals have adapt adapted (verb form) different lifestyles such as most younger persons adapt foreign culture dramatically. Hence, they start wear weating foreign dresses for look beautifully beautiful and live fashionable. (124 words. Word repetition. Subject-verb agreement. Parallelism.)

On the other hand, sometimes, movies and fashions of various country countries shed a wrong affect on youngsters. Consequently, they start abnormal behavior such as violence in their country and it affects the same country peace. This disturbs peace and harmony of a society. Furthermore, some people adapt adopt other country foreign lifestyle and abondon own country culture and history. It affects identity of the country This seriously hampers the unique identity of an individual. For instance, people start living in foreign nations a many years ago, so that new generations forget about own country traditions which affects the people real identity. Not a strong example. Discuss with me. (82 words. Repetitions. Adapt vs Adopt.)

To conclude, it is true that merits of …….. outweigh demerits. Moreover, if people start to know and learn other country languages and culture through these things, then, it saves will save a lot money which people spend for travel to know other country lifestyle (wrong if …., then ….. clause usage.)(41 words. Conclusion is out of context. Lost context.)

words = 290.

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IELTS Cue Card August 2017: A Well-Paid Job.

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Talk about a well-paid job that you would like to have in the future. Please say

– What is it?
– Why do you want to do it?
– How will you achieve it?

Answer:

I’ve been working as a software engineer for the last five years and my long-term goal is to start my own software firm. I would love to become the Chief Executive Officer (CEO) of my own company. (What is it?)

My father is a businessman and he has always taught me the value of being an independent professional working to make his dreams-come-true than working for someone else. My dream is to solve impending issues facing humanity. I believe big data and artificial intelligence can solve the problems such as crime. (Why do you want to do it?)

I’m planning to gain sufficient work experience in a global software company and develop a network of clients before plunging into the world of business. I will also develop contacts with angel investors who can finance the company’s infrastructure. However, above all I need a mentor who can guide me to achieve my goals. (How will you achieve it?)

Follow-up questions.

– Do you think you will be able to get this job?
– What occupations should be paid better? Why?
– Is high salary important when looking for a job?
– What other aspects of a job are important apart from the salary?
– What do you think is important for job satisfaction?
– What should workers do if they are not provided incentives?
– What is important for motivation?
– Does company get any benefits by providing motivation to its workers?

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IELTS Essay Task 2 August 2017: People Watch Similar Films, Advertisements, Music And Fashion.

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Nowadays people from different countries watch and enjoy similar films, advertisements, music, and fashion. Do you agree or disagree? What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Introduction: (Introduce the topic and state your opinion. MENTION advantages and disadvantages. EXPLAIN them in the Body Paragraphs.)

The advent of globalization has led to the proliferation of the western media in various parts of the world. I strongly believe that people today tend to watch west inspired movies, advertisements, music, and fashion. While this has led to the downfall of local culture and over influence of one culture over others (Disadvantages), this had also infused the world with creativity and innovation (Advantages).

Body Paragraph 1: (Explain Advantages)

Clearly, the innovation and creativity in mainstream media have captured the attention of the people. The movies with special effects, latest fashion, and appealing music have dominated the mindset of the audience. For instance, Hollywood and Bollywood movies are often released throughout the world. Clearly, local culture, music, dance, and fashion are unable to compete with the modern, global media industry. Similarly, advertisements are no longer just a source of information. They have evolved into an attention-grabbing, entertainment industry. Consequently, people are hooked to similar advertisements that display high-quality, latest-fashion content.

Body Paragraph 2: (Explain Disadvantages)

Despite these advantages, watching similar movies, music, and fashion are leading to gradual but certain death of local cultures. People are no more interested in their own culture and traditions. One research has shown that every year at least 10 different human languages and cultures die because people no longer follow them. Consequently, the world is becoming more homogenous and less diverse. Moreover, this is causing dominance of one culture, mostly western, over other cultures. For instance, these days people wear only western clothes and have given up their traditional attire. In India, western dresses are often perceived as superior to local dresses such as a kurta-pajama in North India and a dhoti in South India.

Conclusion: (Conclude the essay with FUTURE and IMPACT)

Though people are watching similar movies, music, and fashion, local artists have started using creativity to attract people’s attention. Music bands such as the Indian Ocean and Pakistani singers such as Rahat Fateh Ali Khan are making concerted efforts to preserve the diversity of cultures. This is important not only to preserve human heritage but also to maintain solidarity within the society.

333 words.

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IELTS Essay Correction: Health Education and Preventative Measures – 1.

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“Prevention is better than cure.” Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. Do you agree or disagree?

IELTS: 40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Please go through the sample answer as well as another student’s answer.

All Every country’s (All = plural; country = singular; every = singular) population‘s health plays a significant role in their its (Singular-plural mistake) countries (the country’s) overall development. If people of a country are unhealthy, it would effect (Learn the difference between Affect and Effect.) affect the wealth of that country. I agree with this given statement because health education and preventive measures are an amazing way to keep people healthy, instead of spending the budget amount on their (who is their?) health treatment. (57 words.)

Firstly, cost of medical care is too high both for individuals and governments. Sometimes, the majority of population are is poor and the government budgets are government’s budget is in deficit. Providing health to people Maintaining public health using preventive measures (expression of the idea is weak) is very extremely cost-effective because people would be aware of risks and causes of health diseases. Hence, they use methods in prevention of diseases. It helps people not only in making body aseptic but also it reduce in reducing medical bills (Rules of parallelism violated). For instance, in the polio eradication programme the government has been using various method methods of health education such as by broadcasting advertisements at on television, radio, (Oxford comma) and printing in newspapers about the polio vaccination date so that people should go to vaccination booths with their child. It eradicates the polio disease at big to a large extent in the India. (121 words.)

Secondly, nowadays, many people are using have a sedentary lifestyle and that people they are the most vulnerable to many health diseases such as obesity, hypertension, and diabetes and so more. So, health education is beneficial for those these (wrong pronoun) people because these diseases take lots of money in maintaining the health of a person and it they (they = these diseases) (Wrong pronoun) also indirectly affect the budget of a country which they (to which noun does “they” refer to?) would use in their growing country’s development. For example, the Delhi government has been making building more parks with gym machines in residential areas. So, so that people can go anytime in these parks for exercises and it also help helps people to stay fit in their daily life(104 words.)

To conclude, benefits of health awareness and preventative measures prior to spreading diseases in susceptible areas is outweigh any post-facto measures. The government should come in front for more health related education programmes and provide more facilities in rural areas so that the people of backward areas also aware of health education. (Rewrite this conclusion using if ….. then …… clause.) (48 words.)

330 words. Your mistakes mostly relate to wrong pronoun usage, parallelism, articles, subject-verb agreement, and vocabulary. Paragraph length is fine. Best Wishes.

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IELTS Writing Task 2 Correction: Crime Has Increased All Over The World – 2.

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Reports are showing that crime has increased all over the world and many people believe that nothing can be done to prevent it, while others disagree. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own experience.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Please go through my answer HERE. Another student has written an answer on this topic.

Answer:

 
Global Globally people have been facing an immense problem of crime for several years. The majority of individuals think that it is impossible to tackle with this problem, not only other people but I am also opposed to this opinion. (39 words. Try reaching 45. Please follow the structure I’ve sent you. Mention WHY you think it is impossible. EXPLAIN this in the body paragraphs.)
 
Firstly, following law and order, which made by governments (passive voice) should be compulsory for all people, either he is a rich person or poor person because it has been seen that many time rich person gave a collosal colossal amount of money and he got free from a crime which was done by him (passive voice). (Long sentence. 52 words.)
 
Rephrase: Firstly, the government should frame law and order policy, which is compulsory for all citizens irrespective of their wealth. Rich often use their colossal amount of money to avoid imprisonment after committing a crime. The law should prevent any such event. (3 sentences. 19, 15 and 7 words. Total words = 41 words.)
Secondly, corruption should be reduced by using various safety measures (Passive Voice. Prefer Active.) of technology such as CCTV surveillance in all public areas (school, bus stands, roadsides and so more places) as well as those places where the risk of more occurrence of crimes of occurrence is high. Consequently, people should automatically start following the rules. Furthermore, give proper guidelines to children in their younger age by parents and school teachers (Passive Voice), so, in future children will become good citizens, hence, crime rate will less in future. (74 words.)
 
Rephrase: Furthermore, parents and school teachers should give proper guidelines to children at a young age so that they become good citizens in the future. This will seriously reduce the crime rate. (Active Voice. Two sentences. Use of adverbs such as seriously.)
 
Thirdly, the crime rate is increasing due to lack of self defence knowledge. In some country countries (some = plural; country = singular.) schools school children are provided self-defence practices but not in all schools of global. However, this practice is not widely prevalent. (Prefer however over but) Hence, by some wrong persons (Passive Voice.) girls should raped or murdered. If girls have a practice of self-protection, they protect themselves from criminals.
Hence, criminals rape and murder innocent girls in third world countries. (Active voice) 
For instance, some girls have to keep pepper spray in their bags so that they can use this it while when someone attacks on the them and they also use their mobile for calling police or trusted person when they have in danger (A very long sentence. Make it short.). Although government already made rules for girls protection (Incomplete sentence. Correct Construction: Although X, Y). (95 words.)
To conclude, in world, by country governments should make more legislate and enforce strict laws for country people so that they criminals cannot think about to do committing crimes. People also should be aware of punishments which are given awarded after crimes. Criminals will have threaten of law orders, so they do not commit crime in the future (Repetition.). Last but not least, self-defense knowledge must be compulsory for all school children, hence, they become self-protector.

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IELTS Essay Correction: Local History More Important Than World History.

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Please go through the sample answer HERE.
Some people believe that for children learning about the local history is more important than knowing the World history. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
 
Our world history play plays a significant role in our present life. Despite this few individuals think that knowledge of local history more beneficial. I strongly disagree with this statement because knowledge of  both histories are is important it states that what happens in our past, I will dicuss some points in upcoming paragraphs. (No need to write this.) (51 words. Length is perfect.) (Subject-verb disagreement.)

First of all, knowledge of local history tells us, who I were was (us vs I). So pupils learning through their local history such as language ???, friends and relatives and local historical buildings are brilliant way to preserve their culture as well as roots. For instance, Sikhs had a great history in which their guru’s made many rules and norms. Follow to this Following these customs are is manadatory for all the Sikh community (all Sikhs) for preserving their history by respect. (72 words. Length is good. Try reaching 80 words.) – benefits of local history.
 
Similarly, the world history is also helpful for children to knowing know about their global past how the world came into existence, and how religions develops developed (tense mistake) and follow were followed by different people of various countries. In addition, its tells us, how the world war begins began. Furthermore, different countries have vivid languages, customs, traditions, religions, historical buildings and monuments such as Tajmahal. (So? Incomplete idea.) (52 words. Short of words. Try reaching 80) – benefits of world history.
 
To conclude, both local and world history have their own significance so pupils learning about their past from their childhood is much important. (This is a cause-effect sentence. While the cause is clear, the effect/ consequence is not clear.)
 
The Government should also make some learning about history programmes in interesting way in shools so that by the help of using these methods pupils will learn more about their both history. (51 words. Perfect length.)
 
226 words. Increase the word length. Introduction and conclusion length is perfect. Increase body paragraph 2 to 80 words.

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IELTS Task 1 Academic: Work-time in the United Kingdom.

The chart shows hours worked per week in the United Kingdom in 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Answer:

The given horizontal bar chart presents information on the percentage of full-time and part-time employees working hours per week for in the United Kingdom in the year 2010. (Introductory sentence)

Most of the part-time employees work for 10 to 19 hours per week while full-time employees work for 40 to 49 hours per week. (Max-Min trend)

Let us structure the body paragraphs before proceeding. We can clearly segregate the data into two parts: Part-time & Full-time. Let us write two paragraphs.

About 22 percent part-time workers are engaged for less than 10 hours per week, and 20 percent are engaged for 20 to 29 hours. More than 60 percent of part-time employees work for less than 30 hours a week. The percentage of part-time employees working for 30 to 39 hours, 40 to 49 hours, and 50 to 59 hours is approximately 10 percent. Those working for more than 60 hours is just 4 percent. (Part-time employees)

The percentage of full-time employees working for less than 20 hours is just 12. 21 percent of full-time employees work 30 to 39 hours and most of them, about 23 percent, work 40 to 49 hours. About 13 percent of employees work for more than 60 hours. (Full-time employees)

173 words.

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IELTS Essay August 2017: Local History More Important Than World History.

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Some people believe that for children learning about the local history is more important than knowing the World history. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

A few days ago I checked a student’s answer to this topic. Please visit the blog post HERE.

Introduction: (Introduce the topic and state your opinion. MENTION the reasons supporting your opinion. EXPLAIN in the body paragraphs.)

Learning history is important because it helps us understand not only the present world but also avoid committing the mistakes of the past generations. I believe both local and world history are equally important. While local history enables children to learn about regional culture and politics, world history allows them to understand how global events shape their region

Body Paragraph 1: (Importance of Local History)

Local history is the history of one’s own ancestors living in the same geographical area. It helps children connect with the past and learn about the innumerable sacrifices the past generations made to create a vibrant present. For instance, Punjab’s history teaches Sikh children how their gurus made sacrifices to protect the residents from religious persecution of the Mughal government. Similarly, the local history of Mohanjodaro and Harappa civilizations teaches students how the forces of nature, if disturbed, can destroy human civilizations. It also teaches them about regional geography, culture, and religious identities.

Body Paragraph 2: (Importance of World History)

The world history complements the local history in helping a student understand the world.  Undoubtedly, the present world is a product of the past, and future generations should avoid the mistakes of the past generations to create a sustainable ecosystem. For instance, understanding the reasons behind world wars and genocides helps students appreciate the need for an inclusive and consensus based approach to solving problems. Moreover, understanding past global events in other countries helps students understand the present problems in their locality. For example, the Great Depression of the 1930s and global financial crisis of 2008 had similar causes. Understanding these two financial events, separated by more than seven decades, will help students prevent future financial catastrophes.

Conclusion: (Conclude the essay with FUTURE and IMPACT)

In conclusion, both global history and local history are important in shaping students’ understanding of the modern world. They are equally necessary for understanding the society and politics of a region along with preventing any future calamity.

305 words.

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IELTS Writing Task 2 Correction: Crime Has Increased All Over The World.

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Reports are showing that crime has increased all over the world and many people believe that nothing can be done to prevent it, while others disagree. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own experience.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

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Answer:

It has become a worrisome trend in recent times on at the rate at which crime increases globally. (Sentence structure is NOT GOOD. Rapidly increasing crime rate has become a worrisome trend throughout the world.)

It is also believed that with this trend, that the whole world will go into doom in no distant time. The question at the center of this issue remains, what can be done to reduce crime rate? (Redundant line) While it sounds strange to some people that crime can be mitigated, if not totally eradicated, others are of the opinion that if public education and proper governmental policies are put in place, the crime rate will decrease and to a large extent be prevented (Passive voice. What can be prevented? Crime rate? The subject “Crime” does not exist in the sentence.) as well. (97 words. This is too long. 30 percent of your total words.)

An African proverb says that prevention is better than cure, so also is the case of crime prevention. We now live in an age where the government of nations only find finds ways to enrich themselves dubiously instead of upholding the core governmental duties of which crime detection and prevention is are cardinal. When adequate measures such as punishment of offenders are put into place by the government (Passive Voice. Prefer Active.), this will go a long way into discouraging prospective offenders. In the political scene of For instance, in Nigeria, the legislature has passed a bill seeking to kill anyone found guilty in of acts such as kidnapping and child rape.

Also, the general public needs to be educated on the negative effects of committing a crime as some people are truly ignorant of the law. In most developing countries, the level of literacy is very low and this speaks volume of what to expect from the nation in terms of the general conduct of the populace. Many undeveloped nations still have people that practice jungle justice and they do this without knowing the implications. (The question is not on the reasons that cause crime. It is on PREVENTING CRIMES. No context.)

In conclusion, the government as well as the masses are the ones to mitigate and prevent crime in a society, therefore, this brings an end to the question (redundancy – these words lack meaning) of whethe the crime can be prevented or not. (Bad Conclusion.)

You’ve missed articles at a few places: the crime rate; the government; crime.

306 words.

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IELTS Cue card August 2017: A Friend Who Studied With You.

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Talk about a friend who studied with you or helped you in any way. Please say

– Who is he/she?
– Where and when did you meet?
– Why did he/she help you?

Answer:

I’m an extrovert person and have numerous friends. However, my closest friend, Tim, who lives in the United States, once helped me in securing a job in the McKinsey. (Introductory sentence. Name of the friend.) 

Tim and I have been friends since the age of five when we were neighbors. We studied in the same school and later attended the New York University. After graduating, I joined a reputed Chinese Finance firm and moved to Shanghai while Tim chose to stay in the New York City and work for McKinsey. (When and where did you meet him?)

Since we are friends since childhood and I have worked in Asia, Europe, and North America, Tim recommended my name for the position of a senior Asia and Europe Consultant in McKinsey. Luckily, I cracked the three rounds of interview and will be joining the reputed company in coming December. (Why did he/she help you?)

Follow-up Questions:

– Do you help others?
– Why do you do it?
– How do you feel after that?

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IELTS Writing Task 2 August 2017: Crime Has Increased All Over The World.

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Reports are showing that crime has increased all over the world and many people believe that nothing can be done to prevent it, while others disagree. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own experience.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

IELTS and PTE examiners have asked questions on crime several times in the past. Here are some similar questions on this website.

  1. Criminals commit crimes once their sentence is over.
  2. Involvement of youth in crime.
  3. Criminals should do unpaid work for the community.

Answer:

Introduction: (Introduce the topic, state your opinion and MENTION reasons supporting your opinion.)

The crime rate has increased tremendously since the dawn of the twentieth century. While some people believe that it cannot be controlled, I think the active participation of individuals, close cooperation of various organs of the state coupled with extensive use of technology can curtail the crime rates.

Body Paragraph 1: (Reason 1 supporting opinion)

Active participation of every adult citizen in preventing crimes in his locality will go a long way in maintaining security. Keeping this in mind, several regional governments have introduced the concept of citizen watch. The people are made eyes and ears of the law enforcement agencies and are motivated to inform the agencies as soon as they witness anything suspicious.

Body Paragraph 2: (Reason 2 supporting opinion)

Moreover, close cooperation of government departments such as intelligence, police, and vigilance can prevent many crimes from occurring. Criminals often resort to breaking the law in one state and crossing over to another state to benefit from lack of cooperation between the law enforcement agencies of the two states. Catching such criminals requires not only cooperation between two state police departments but also a national investigating agency that has jurisdiction over the whole country.

Body Paragraph 3: (Reason 3 supporting opinion)

Finally, extensive use of technology can help curtail crime rates. Since many criminals are active on social media websites such as Facebook, the investigating agencies scour through millions of social media posts to catch people who may try to commit crimes in the near future. This has been adopted as a credible and reliable strategy in the global war against terrorism. 

Conclusion: (Conclude the essay with FUTURE and IMPACT)

Increasing crime rates – both small crimes such as a theft and heinous ones such as a terrorist strike – is a threat to modern social order. Adopting right strategy and tactics will help governments reduce crime rates and make society more peaceful and secure.

286 words.

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PTE Essay (IELTS task 2) Correction: Researching Family’s History.

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In some parts of the world, it is becoming popular to research the history of one’s own family. Why people want to do this ? is it a positive or negative development?

IELTS: 40 minutes, 250 words at least.

PTE: 20 minutes, 200 to 300 words.

Answer:

Please go through the answer explanation and structure HERE.

In various countries around the globe, people are looking forward to trace tracing their origins. Nowadays, people are moving towards the spirituality and peace of mind.

In the field of neuroscience, we can find enormous development(s) which lead to introspect inwards rather than outwards. Nonetheless, it’s a cardinal progress which has been done by the human kind. (I can’t see the relation of these two lines either to the topic or to the introduction. What is the relation of neuroscience to our topic? What is the cardinal progress?) You need to learn the art of INTRODUCTION.

Apparently, Neuroscience is becoming the core of every aspect of life. Moreover, doctors believe that if we could contemplate the source of the issue or any sort of disease, so, these could be dealt in an appropriate way. As we do find some diseases or disorders which are genetically inherited (Incomplete sentence)This paragraph is on neuroscience and I can’t see any relevance to our question.

On the other hand, there are some research has been done on the learning skills or abilities by the psychologist (Passive Voice. Prefer Active.) and neuroscientist Carol Dweck who sheds the light on these historical introspections. At present, there is a shift of paradigm paradigm shift in the society which is leading the western world to this sort of phenomenon. In order to comprehend, the formation of habit pattern of humankind, it’s it is (Don’t use contractions in formal writing) essential to establish a relation with our past or history. Recently, I read a book “The Power of habit” by Charles Dhuigg wherein he has elucidated numerous behavior patterns those where (wrong pronoun. Use which instead of those) which are related to the peoples’ historical backgrounds.

In order to conclude, In conclusion, I’d would like to mention that (redundant words) these researches are the a result of the new development of the era of the technology and the zeal of researchers to know the unknown aspects of humankind. In future, hopefully, there will be unprecedented research in this domain of historical introspection.

The essay was complex and lacked ideas. You didn’t explain your ideas adequately. Your writing includes heavy words that do not convey the meaning properly. Bands = 6.0 to 6.5.

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IELTS Essay August 2017: Criminals Should do Unpaid Work for Community.

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Some people say that not all criminals should be sent to prison. Instead, they should do unpaid work to help people in the community. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Please go through these essays on crime as well:

  1. Criminals commit crime once their sentence is over. Why?
  2. Involvement of youth in crime.

Introduction(Introduce the topic and state your opinion. MENTION the reasons supporting your opinion.)

In order to create a sustainable and safe society, the institutions should be reform oriented. Though criminals who have committed heinous crimes such as a murder should be put behind bars, I think petty offenders should be reformed through community work. Engaging them in the local community will not only build a bond with the people but also help them become productive and contribute to overall development.

Body Paragraph 1: (Reason 1 – bond with the people)

Normal people often commit crimes because they do not empathize with others. To promote social empathy among these individuals, the unpaid work for the community is essential. Merely incarcerating them is not a solution to any problem. The United States government, for instance, punishes crimes like drunk driving, theft, and white collar crimes with community work because it helps the offenders to empathize with poor or disabled people and realize the selfishness of their actions. This promotes peace and harmony in the society.

Body Paragraph 2: (Reason 2 – productive and contribute)

Moreover, selflessly working for the community helps to make criminals a productive member of the society. For instance, in open jails of India, criminals are often motivated to engage in a commercial project that benefits the society. Since many people commit crimes because they cannot find jobs, commercial engagement trains them for a paid job. This also helps them contribute to the ecosystem of business and community development. Seeing the benefit of their work, criminals are reformed and find a productive path in life.

Conclusion: (Conclude the essay with FUTURE and IMPACT)

In conclusion, imprisoning criminals is not a solution to the problem of increasing crime rates in our society. The criminals need to be engaged in a manner that teaches them the benefits of hard-work and reforms them for economically and socially productive lives.

277 words.

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