IELTS Essay Correction: English More Important Than Local Languages – 4.

English Language IELTS PTE

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Learning English at school is often seen more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion is it important to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages, if so how?

40 Minutes, 250 words.

Here is my answer (with structure) on this topic.

Please go through other students’ essays (with corrections) on the same topic:

Student Essay 1

Student Essay 2

Student Essay 3

Answer:

The English is a widely spoken language in all over the world. While local languages are important as well, since these show the several cultures and unique identities of people in the communities(missed a comma) and knowledge of the English empowers individual to communicate internationally. (Strange sentence. While construction incomplete. Since construction not clear.) (42 words.)

Firstly, globally, the English is an official language. Hence, schools and Governments are mostly emphasize on the english subject it as a medium of instruction so that children become are able to speak and write english the language perfectly in during their academic years. It enables people to choose their career and establish business in the foreign countries. For instance, if a businessman has proper knowledge of English, he will easily communicate with foreigners while travelling or conferencing. Furthermore, it is beneficial to become bilingual or multilingual. People gain since it helps in gaining knowledge of the different nations and the English language helps allows people to understand foreign cultures, foods, and lifestyle. Connect the sentences. (95 words.)

Undoubtedly, the local regional (word repetition: local) dialects play a pivotal role in preserving the local Heritage of a nation. Schools and Governments should provide essential programmes for conservation of endangered local native languages and also deliver dialects language subjects and materials to students and people so that they could can read easily. In addition, parents should be foster on encourage their children to keep in touch with own the local language. It helps a community to identify uniquely in several maintain its unique ideatity separate from other communities. For instance, Punjabi people identify easily are easily identified in the crowd because they have unique culture, language, and lifestyle. (89 words.)

In conclusion, if people learn english English as well as local language, they will not only preserve their heritage but also learn foreign cultures and traditions. This will definitely become the homogeneous world help maintain a unique identity while preserving global unity and integrity(32 words.)

Total Words = 258 words. Bands = 6.5 to 7.0. Avoid word repetitions in the same stem “local”.

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