IELTS Task 1 Academic Correction: Recycling Aluminum Cans.

The flow chart below shows the process of recycling aluminum cans. 

Write a report describing the information shown below.

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20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Please go through the sample answer HERE.

Answer:

The diagram depicts the method of recycling of aluminum cans. There are six steps in the reprocessing of aluminum cans commencing with the collection of used cans by collectors and ending with new bottles after processing in various machines. (37 words.) You can avoid repeating aluminum cans twice by connecting the two sentences. This will also increase cohesion. Rephrase: The given diagram depicts the method of recycling of aluminum cans in six steps commencing with the collection ………..

Firstly, garbage collectors gather empty cans from houses, schools, and gardens. After that, they , and (Oxford comma. Discuss or read the article) handover them to scrap dealers and recycling centres. (Confusion in your sentence: they handover them….. Same pronoun refering to two nouns. Discuss.)

These cans are crushed as well as flattened into bales. Then bales are passed through crusher making into small chips. Further, chips are subjected into furnace and heated at mild temperatures to remove paintings and coatings. (56 words.)

Later, the Melter heats the chips at 350 degrees Celsius and melts them to helps in melting the chips and casts cast them into ingots which are placed on a sheet compressor and roller to cast into new sheets. Finally, these sheets are subjected to cutting and moulding (OR are cut and moulded) to make new aluminium cans. Again, vicious cycle repeated(46 words.) Vicious = vice, bad. Wrong word usage.

In conclusion, recycling of aluminum cans is a complex process which involves many steps such as crushing, heating, compressing and moulding.

Total words = 160 words. Bands = 7.0

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