IELTS Academic Task 1, Correction: Bottled Water Consumption – 1.

The pie graph below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and the bar-chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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20 minutes, 150 words at least.

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Answer:

The pie chart illustrates the utilization of packed drinking water in the eight countries as a percent of the world consumption in 1999 and the bar chart demonstrates the percent changes of bottled water consumption in same countries in 2001. (Very well-written.)

Overall, the bottled water consumption in Western Europe were was the highest and lowest that (refers to bottled-water consumption, referencing word for cohesion) in the Asia was the lowest in 1999, while, Asia’s bottled water consumption increased at the fastest pace and that of the Western Europe decreased rose at slowest pace (it is also increasing) after 2 years.

On the one hand, in 1999, the bottled water consumption in Western Europe significantly high to at 48 percent. Australia, New Zealand, and Latin America had marginal differences in packed drinking water utilization (15,13,10 percent respectively). Rewrite without using brackets.

Rephrase: Packaged drinking water utilization (subject) in Australia, New Zealand, and Latin America was (verb) marginally different at 15, 13 and 10 percent (numbers – object) respectively. OR Australia, New Zealand, and Latin America (subject) had (verb) marginal differences in packaged drinking water utilization and consumed 15, 13 and 10 percent (numbers – object) respectively. 

An equal percent utilization of bottled water in the Middle East and Africa, 5 percent, similarly, Asia and USA also equal and least consumption of bottled water.

Rephrase: The Middle East and Africa (subject) consumed (verb) an equal proportion of global bottled water use, 5 percent (number – object)Link number with the proportion of bottled water, not the country.

On the other hand, in 2001, Asia’s packed drinking water consumption dramatically rose to by 14 percent. An equal percent utilization of bottled water in both Latin America and Newzealand about 12 percent and the bottled water consumption expanded to by 10 percent in the Middle East and Africa. Africa and USA had 8 percent utilization of packed drinking water. On the contrary, the Western Europe bottled water consumption declined and remained only 2 percent. (You’ve misread. Bar Chart refers to changes in percentage, not the actual consumption. Please re-write.)

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