IELTS Task 1 Academic Correction: Work-time in the United Kingdom – 1.

The chart shows hours worked per week in the United Kingdom in 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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20 minutes, 150 words.

Please go through the sample answer as well.

Answer:

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of British people with worked working full-time and part-time jobs for different hours in per a week of the full time and part time jobs in the United Kingdom in 2010.

Overall, the percentage of employees, who worked 10-19 hours part-time and 40-49 hours full-time per week were the highest in 2010. most of the part-time employees were engaged for 10 to 19 hours per week while most of the full-time employees were working for 40 to 49 hours per week. (Full-time and part-time should be linked to jobs/ employment and not hours. Clearly mentioned in the bar-chart as well.)

On the one hand, the full time worked employees, who were engaged for 40-49 hours were significantly high as well as and the workers engaged for 30-39 hours were slightly lower than the highest percentage. Rephrase: On the one hand, 23 percent of the full-time employees (subject) were engaged for 40 to 49 hours (time) and (connector) 21 percent worked (subject) (no need of writing ‘of full-time employees’) for 30 to 39 hours (time)

The percentage of workers, those worked 20-29, 50-59, and 60 or above hours almost had marginal differences in their percent 16, 15, and 13 respectively. The percentage of workers (subject) busy for 20 to 29, 50 to 59 and more than 60 hours were almost same at 16, 15 and 13 respectively.

7 percent workers, up to 10 hours and the least percentage of employees, who worked 10-19 hours. 7 percent of full-time employees worked from 10 to 19 hours and (connector) the least percent worked for less than 10 hours.

On the other hand, 24 percent part-time job workers engaged 10-19 hours and mildly less percentage of United Kingdom people, who worked up to 10 hours than highest one. (please follow the structures above to rewrite this sentence.) the percentage of employees worked 30-39, 40-49, and 50-59 hours had marginal differences around 10 percent. The least percentage of workers, those worked for 60 or more hours in their part-time job.

Please re-write this answer following correct sentence structure and re-submit the answer.

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