IELTS Academic Task 1 Correction: Scores of Three Teams – 4.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B, and C over four different seasons.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Please read the SAMPLE ANSWER and student 1’s and student 2’s answer as well.

The bar graph illustrates the results of the three teams in 2002, 2003, 2004, and 2005 seasons. Overall, Team B was the highest scorer in all four seasons and Team A achieved slightly less points than team B in 2004. While the Team C scored the least points in 2004 and 2005. (Well written)

Evidently, Team B scored 82 points in 2002 which was followed by 60 scores in 2003. It showed moderately fall in scores in 2004, about 42 points, a moderate fall to 42 points in 2004 whereas in 2005 ,it again gradually rose to 55. (42 points should be lined to ‘fall‘ and not year.)

Team A attained 35 points in 2004 which was the minimum score of this year (Wrong linkages, again. Link WHICH with the number or noun it modifies. Note: In 2004 team A attained 35 points, which was the minimum score during this year.), while it scored 11 points in 2003 and it had the marginal score difference of 5 and 8 points in 2002 and 2005 respectively.

Team C scored 10 points in 2002 which (Wrong linkage. Explained above.) was (no need to make it passive voice.) steadily increased to 15 scores in 2003. However in 2004, it was slightly dropped to 12. While, the least score achieved only 5 in 2005. (Rephrase the last two lines by linking them and writing only one line: However in 2004 it slightly dropped to 12 and in 2005 it fell to the lowest to only 5 points.)

Total Words = 158. No major mistake. Bands = 6.5.

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