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IELTS Task 1, Academic Correction: Water Use.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

global water use 1global water use 2

20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Answer:

The line graph demonstrates water usage in the world from the year 1900 to 2000 while the table illustrates the water utilization in Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo.

Overall, the consumption of water for agriculture usage purposes was very high the highest throughout the given duration and it reached by reaching nearly 3000 km3 in the year 2000 and the (no articles with country names, except those with abbreviations.) Brazil was higher than Democratic Republic of Congo in comparison of population, irrigated land, and water consumption per person. (this is not a feature. Please note that while Brazil’s population is 30 times that of DRC and its irrigated area is 256 times, its water consumption per person is 45 times – all approximations.). Moreover, while Brazil’s population is 30 times that of Democratic Republic of Congo (DRC) and its irrigated area if 256 times that of DRC, its per person consumption of water is 45 times that of DRC.

Firstly, in the line graph, global water usage was done by three sectors  agriculture, industrial, and domestic. There was a significant growth from approximately 500 km3 to 3000 km3 between the years 1900 and 2000 in agriculture when as compared to other two sectors. Further, even though the remaining two sectors were started at the same point (nearly 100km3), at the end ?? (mention a date) there was a difference in the usage of water about 1200 km3 and 400km3 for the sectors industrial and domestic usage. Rephrase: Further, though the industrial and domestic use of water was the same, about 100 km3, in 1900, the gap widened to approximately 1000 km3 by the end of the century.

Secondly, the Brazil had the highest population, irrigated land, and water consumption per person of 176 million, 26,500 km2, and 359 m3 respectively. As opposed to that the other country’s population was significantly very low about 5.2 million and the land, water consumption were also very less around 100 km2 and 8 m3 respectively. (You will not score bands for writing numbers.)

Total Words = 204. Bands = 6.0 

Main problem: Spotting trends when dats is huge and is in table format.

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