IELTS Essay Correction: Genetically Modified Food – 1.

Injection Tomato Food Genetic Modified Genetically
Injection Tomato Food Genetic Modified Genetically

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With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM foods. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

40minutes, 250 words at least.

Please go through the sample answer as well.

Answer:

Undoubtedly human population has been (Tense. Please discuss) rapidly advancing (has rapidly advanced) since a decade ago, owing to the development in medical science. Unfortunately modern techonology have has (Subject-Verb agreement) not kept pace in genetically modified crops to meet the humongous needs of an increasing population people. (people can’t be humongous. needs can be. while humongous is an uncountable noun, people is countable.) Maryiad Myriad people opine that the only viable solution is that to address the issue of increase the production of genetically modified crop yields since it not only deters the malnutrion but also feeds the 9 billion people on the planet earth. However, numerous anti–genetcally modified activits (activists can’t be genetically modified.), who oppose GM foods, claim that its major drawback is destructions of naturally grown foods.

Malnutrion, (this is a modifier and it needs to be placed within commas) which is since lack of nutrients such as iron, calcium and phosphate, can be treated with the more and more genetically produced foods. According to human development report GM is a direct solution financially and technolocally secured solution of it (According to human development report, GM foods are financially (collocation) viable and technologically (collocation) superior solution to this (referencing) problem.). Moreover, as fields of crops yields increase, a large number of humans can be feed fed easily. Genectically modified  has potential to increase (increase what?) food production on a limited resource of land in least lesser time. For instance, chemicals using in GM help the crop yields to grow up increase speedly as compare to the past. Today  this has become possible to overcome the issue for feeding the large human population. (repetition of the first line)

Conversely, genetically modified food has adverse effect on adjoining area of land where these crops are yields. produced. To illustrate the demerits’ of GM crops yields Brinjal is the best example, it was grown up in India in 2016 by using genetically modified method way, Not only this crop was destroyed by opting the GM method, it has made barren the related all parts of close the nearby land area barren(please use direct object, followed by indirect object.)

In conclusion, although GM crop yields has negative impacts on land, but (do not use although and but in the same sentence.) it has brought huge metrits in solving the hunger problem of larger population on  planet Earth. Risks of genetically crops can be lessen if it has done is executed under supervision of the a qualified team of the GM. (Conclusion is good)

Bands = 6.0 to 6.5

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