IELTS General Task 1 Correction: Room Which You Share With Another Student.

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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at college. In the letter:

-Describe the situation

-Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work 

-Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer?

Answer:

Dear sir/mam,

I am Moquadis Shaheen from Pakistan I have been living in sharing room provided by the college. In this accommodation I face some issues of noise. I am a solitary person, so I would request you to arrange a separate room. (Connect the two sentences using connecting words – since and and. Since I am a solitary person and I am facing noise related issues in this (referencing) apartment, I request you to arrange a separate room for me.)

My room is very noisy when I come from college or from work. I cannot take rest since my roomate does not care of my rest-time timing or sleeping. She is very an extremely annoying personality (separate a general statement from a sentence), such as For instance (understand the difference between such as and for example) she turnup turns up the music and starts dance, dancing. Moreover, (use this connecting word) she turns light on in the room. Loud music disturb disturbs me a great deal. Moreover if I am studying focusing is difficult on my subject Furthermore, (connecting word) I am unable to focus on my studies in such (connecting word) a disturbing (collocation) atmosphere. Also she makes room messy all the time by dispersing every thing any where.

I would like to request you to change my room with a civilized student or provide me a single room where I can do my study as well as rest to perform properly in my work.

I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.

Yours sincerely,

MOQUADIS SHAHEEN.

Total Words = 165. Bands = 6.5

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