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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
40 minutes, 250 words only.
A good working environment is very important to improve our working skills, to get promoted and even to enjoy a stable life. Many argue that working in the same organisation is beneficial (MENTION reasons here) while others prefer to experience their work in different companies (Mention reasons here).
This essay agrees that pursuing a job in a single institution is better as it provides job security and a comfortable environment to work on. This essay will discuss both points of view.
resuming continuing the same job throughout their life brings many economic benefits to the employee employees. As they are familiar with the working environment, they know how to do a particular task or to tackle some of the official problems. Moreover, since they are doing (Wrong tense – present continuous) the same thing over many years so they get mastered in that area and and their experiences increases the chances of getting promoted. (Eliminate the need of present continuous by making an auxiliary verb the main verb. Rephrase: Moreover, doing the same job over several years helps an individual become an expert in that area and increases the chances of a promotion.) Furthermore, the employers employees who are doing (Wrong tense – present continuous.) do (carry-out) their jobs in a single institution for a long time will (Use Simple Present tense only) get emotionally attached to the collaboration and they (This pronoun violates the principle of Parallelism.) get the feeling of being at home and helps help (Verbs – get, get and help – should be parallel) them work with honestly and diligent dedication (dedication = diligence). Apart from that, they will be are respected as a senior employees and even sometimes provideded with financial benefits and insurance coverage. For example, my aunt who started her career as a staff nurse in a multi specialty hospital worked diligently in the same institution and got retired as a Nursing Superintendent after her 36 years of service.
On the other hand, working in various organisation gives us the opportunity to learn and experience new areas and
new (avoid word repetition) fresh skills. Each new institution provides new a different environment and need new demands (parallelism) specific skills to excel and thus increases employee skill set. At times we may be getting higher post or high remuneration as we join another institution. However, it can be extremely difficult to get adapted to the changing environment and it even takes more time to show our skills and talent so as to get a designation we incur ????. For example, when I joined Reliance Company with a 5 years of experience, I was given the post of General Manager with a higher pay scale. (Add some more meat to your examples. For instance: When I joined Reliance Industries after working in Tata Motors for five years, the company valued my experience and offered my the position of a General Manager of its Mumbai region operations.)
In conclusion, continuing the same job creates economic and personal benefit while working for a different organisation, one should be competitive enough and should have adaptation skills to get familiar with the changing environment.
Total Words = 386. Too long. You must save some time for revision. Bands = 6.5. Repetition of several old mistakes.
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