The graph gives information about the
proportion of physical activity (it’s the proportion of men and women, not physical activity.) done by men and women proportion of men and women engaged in physical activity in Australia during 2010. Overall, it can be seen that females exercised more than males with the exception of the age bracket between 15 to 24 years. (Note: The correct constructions are Between X and Y; From X to Y. from 15 to 24 years; between 15 and 24 years; in the age group 15 to 24 years.) When we look in details Evidently/ Clearly, slightly under half of the women started exercising when they are were teenagers (there’s no mention of TEENAGERS in the question. Please do not interpret any thing in task 1. Moreover, teenagers also include kids in age group 13 and 14.). As women grow grew older, the amount number gradually increased at the high of to 53.3 % percent in the age group 45 to 54 years and leveled off until mid-sixties.
NOTE: Amount = uncountable noun. Use it where you can’t count things. The amount of sugar. Number = countable noun. The number of people.
Turning to men Among men, more than half of them started (began) exercising when they are were young, at 52.8% (NOTE: Number qualify the noun with which they are linked. In your case, 52.8 qualifies YOUNG and not THEM. Among men, 52.8 percent engaged in exercising at a young age of 15 to 24 years.). As men get got older, the gap between both sexes steadily rises rose, with women exercising more than men, until the age of 44. After mid-forties, there is was a slight increase in the proportion of exercising men, from 43.1 to 46.7 percent.
Lastly, men and women older than 65 years-old exercised around similar levels, 46.7
% percent and 47.1 % percent respectively.
Total Words = 146. Bands = 6.0.
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