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IELTS Academic Task 1 Correction: Fish Imported to the United States.

The pie charts and table give information about the total value and source of fish imported to the United States between 1988 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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20 minutes, 150 words only.

Answer:

The given table illustrates the total value of fish import to the US in B billions of D dollars in 1988, 1992 and 2000 while the pie charts depict the percentage of fish exported from Canada, China, and other countries to the US in the same three years. (Perfect!)

Overall, the value of fish almost doubled over the period. At the starting of the period In 1988, the US bought fish mainly from Canada while by 2000 other countries become the main (dominant) source.

Regarding the table (no need to write this), the value of imports increased by almost 2 four billion dollars in all three during these (these builds cohesion) years starting from 6.57 billion dollars in 1988 to 10.72 in 2000(Note: The question is on MAIN FEATURES and MAKE COMPARISONS. Avoid giving too much data.)

In 1988, Canada, with a 60 percent share, was the main exporter of fish to the US with 60% (give numbers as modifiers and connect them with the NOUN they modify. 60 percent modifies Canada, not the US.) while China and other countries provide only 13% percent and 27% percent respectively. However, later in 1992 US fish import from Canada fell over the period almost by a half reaching to 34% (However, by 1992, the share of Canadian fish exports to the US fell by about 50 percent to 34 percent.) while import from other countries increased dramatically to 46% and became the main source of fish for the US. During this period the import from China increased by 7%. (use percent in place of %. Do you understand the difference between percent and percentage?)

US imports of fish from Canada has (stick to the past tense) fell over a half during this period reaching 28% as opposed to China that witnessed an increase to 30% in 2000. During this period, though the exports from other countries to the US decreased slightly by 4%, it still remained as a major source of fish to the US. (Though construction.)

Total Words = 229. Too long. You’re not only wasting precious time that should better be implemented in writing task 2 (during exam), but also over-exposing yourself. This will make you more vulnerable to mistakes.

Bands = 6.5. Learn to write comparisons and main features. Avoid stating the data.

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