IELTS Essay Correction: Several Languages Die Out and Saving Them is Not Important.

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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are few languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Another language essay: English as global business language.

Answer:

It is true that languages diminish by the with time. Although some people argue that this does not have any significance, in my opinion languages are very extremely (extremely is a better word than very) valuable and its their (subject-pronoun disagreement. languages = plural; its = singular) presence matters. (give reasons supporting your view and explain them in the body paragraph)

…… in my opinion they are extremely valuable and their presence matters since they are the core of cultural identity.

People who claim that loss of languages is not important believe that this makes our lives more convenient because communication will be is easier with fewer languages numbers (what do you mean by numbers? instead of using a wrong synonym, prefer the original word.). Since there are more than four hundred languages in the world, it is challenging at times to communicate or do business between nations. The high number of languages cause an increase need for interpreters. Also, interpreters they (prefer a pronoun when a noun has already been used. This builds cohesion through referencing.) are not sufficient enough all the time (Merge the two sentences: The high number of languages result in an increase in demand of interpreters, who (pronoun to connect sentences – builds cohesion) are not available in sufficient numbers sometimes.). In certain situations, even if the conversation is translated, (need two commas to create a modifier. discuss with me for greater clarity.) people cannot understand the real meaning of a sentence. It might be more than just the words itself which can only be expressed in that particular language. As a result, the higher the number of nations speak the same, the easier greater the understanding. (the paragraph is well-written. However, it is NOT your opinion. Lost Task Response bands.)

On the other hand, I believe that loss of a language has a major impact on nations (please maintain your opinion throughout the passage and state this only in the introduction. Body paragraphs are meant to EXPLAIN your opinion, not STATE it.). Spoken language is related with to the nation and if the language disappears the nation will perish. (Language forms the core of the identity of a community and without it the community perishes.) Language involves the history, sense of humour and understanding of other feelings of a society which are unique to them. Without these, nations will diminish as well (Repetition of an idea in different words. You’ve mentioned perish above.). For example, Acolans, a minority community which who live(they are past now) in a different culture, started educating their children in the English language and following that soon the number of Acolans who spoke Aco decreased gradually. Nowadays, no one knows about Acolans and it is believed that this nation did not last cause because their language diminished. (I like this example. It is adequately explained.)

In conclusion, I strongly believe that languages are of paramount importance and they maket the societies last. The maximum effort should be spent to protect them it is the only way to maintain different cultures cultural identity(The governments should design plans and implement them in educational institutions as well as government organisations to protect the local languages.) (You can mention a solution to make your conclusion better and increase the number of words. Please write about 40 words.)

Bands = 6.5. You lost about 0.5 due to lack of Task Response. Please write more elaborate conclusion.

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