IELTS Essay Correction: Languages Die Out And Saving Them Is Not Important – 1.

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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are few languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Another language essay: English as global business language.

Answer:

It is argued that extinction of some languages is not a problem as having fewer languages provides people with an easier life. Taking into account of the importance of a language to a nation’s culture (perfect modifier!), I disagree that using a few key languages makes the dying out of less spoken ones morally acceptable. (Well done!)

A language is not just a group of spoken words, instead is but also the origin to many nations’ culture (correct construction: not just X, but also Y. X and Y are parallel.). language has evolved evolves (Simple Present tense since this is true for all languages – both from present and past.) over thousands of years to reflect what it means to be from a particular region. For example, the Turkish language has one of the widest vocabularies in all over the world and reflects their its (Turkish language = singular subject) traditional storytelling. Despite this fact, English has become the most commonly used global business (global is same as all over the world) language all over the world (OR commonly used language all over the world), especially in storytelling, because many people feel that it is easier to communicate with the rest of the world. In addition, English has become the dominant language of technology, science and international business. As a result, American culture has become more popular nowadays and other cultures may be damaged due to this subtle intrusion. (Note the articles mistakes.) I like this paragraph.

By speaking just a couple of languages such as English and Chinese, you a person can communicate with billions of people throughout the world. Certain languages such as English may be more commonly used, however as a second tongue, it would take several generations for everyone to learn it However (connect with previous sentence), learning these dominant languages is not easy for non-native speakers and generally it takes several generations to learn a foreign language completely (Instead of writing English, prefer these which promotes cohesion through referencing. Clearly write your opinion – NOT EASY. Let the examiner clearly read it. Helps maintain task response.). Countries such as Hong Kong and Japan have been trying to adopt English as a second dialect for a long time, but their people still cannot fully grasp it. However Nevertheless (however used at a number of places. Avoid repetition.), English has been the language of business for so long and it should be encouraged to help a country to become economically competitive (issues – the essay is not on English language. This paragraph is too much English language dependent.).

In conclusion, I believe that commonly spoken languages may make life more straightforward and increase intra-cultural communication, however, to prevent cultural erosion, this change should not be at the expense of the extinction of the less prevalent languages, in order to avoid the erosion of the cultures.

Sentence structure is good. I can’t see many grammar mistakes. Task response is fine as well. Cohesion is good.

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