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IELTS Essay Correction: We’re Producing More and More Rubbish – 1.

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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? 

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Households produce a huge amount of waste each day and that includes a lot of items from daily life. The main reason behind this is the nature of human beings, who tend to throw dispose things very easily frequently, rather than replacing and recycling it or giving it to a charity (Could have used better vocabulary here). Governments can limit the amount of waste thrown by every household and they can build up centres where overused or discarded items can be given for charity. (Well-structured introduction. Mentioned the reasons as well as solutions. Good job!)

Human beings have this the tendency of buying things more things than are needed (more X than Y) and later throw discarding them later (parallelism: TWO tendencies – buying and discarding). This is because when they go out to buy those things, there is usually a sale or discount, attracted to which they buy extra items which they do not even need which (link pronoun directly) attracts/ entices them to purchase things they do not need. These extra items contribute This contributes to extra waste thrown from a household. For example, a survey conducted by the members of the council in India in 2015 showed that the amount of kitchen/ vegetable waste thrown by an average Indian household each day has increased from 58 percent in the past to 93 percent (58 percent of what? 98 percent of what?) by about 35 percent during the last decade(Naming the wastes will add to the quality of this sentence.)

Governments can take action against this by employing some basic steps. Firstly, it they (governments = plural) can impose a limit (they can’t limit, but they can impose a limit) on the amount of rubbish thrown every day from each house and impose a fine on throwing more than what is allowed. Secondly, it they can build up centres where people can donate their overused or discarded furniture or electronic appliances. People who are not capable of buying those items would rather prefer to take those home, moderate a few things if needed and use it again for years. (Measures are explained in detail.)

In conclusion, human beings should purchase only those things which are needed and try to reduce the amount of waste thrown each day. Governments should take initial steps in controlling the rubbish produced from each house. Successful achievement of these steps would will definitely decrease the waste production in the future. (Excellent!)

Paragraph structuring, cohesion, task response are good. Some vocabulary issues. Try using words appropriately. Scope for sentence structuring exists. Bands = 6.5.

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