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IELTS Task 1 Academic Correction: Telephone Calls in The United Kingdom.

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20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Please go through the SAMPLE ANSWER.

Answer:

The bar chart compares the amount of time as (redundant. Gives no additional information.) number of minutes of calls on the phone by three different categories over a 7-year period in the United Kingdom. (NOTE: The chart is not comparing the number of minutes. It is comparing the types of calls. Please place the YEARS – an object of time – at the end of the sentence.)

The given bar chart (subject) compares (verb) the three types of telephone calls (primary object – usually written at the top of the chart) in terms of number of billion minutes (secondary object – X-axis) in the United Kingdom (secondary object – place) over a seven-year period (secondary object – time)

Overall, the local fixed line was the most popular type of telephone call, while mobile calls were the least preferred method of call with an a rapidly increasing trend throughout the period. (The overall does not mention the MAIN FEATURE: As the time progressed, the gap between the three types of calls gradually decreased/closed/ bridged.)

The number of minutes for local calls started just above 70 billion in 1995, increased gradually to around 90 billion at the end of the 1990s and finished the period with a decrease at then gradually/ consistently decreased to around 70 billion in 2002.

The minutes for national and international calls experienced a slight increase increased gradually/ consistently/ moderately, starting at around 35 billion and finishing at 60 billion.

First 4 years of the period saw a gradual rise in minutes for mobile calls. (Prefer using mobile calls as the subject of the sentence since it will reverberate throughout the paragraph. Mobile calls increased at a gradual pace during the first four years of the given period.) After the beginning of 2000s, the minutes for mobile calls rocketed to more than 40 billions, which was just only half of the peak level of local lines during 1999.

Bands = 6.5 to 7.0. With better sentence structuring, you’ll definitely score 7.0 in task 1.

Total words = 158.

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