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IELTS Task 1, Academic Correction: Underground Railway System – 3.

The table below gives information about the underground railway system in six countries.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

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20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Answer:

The given table illustrates the information about underground railway systems’ date started starting dates, length of the route, and number of passengers traveling per year in 6 six cities. (Please mention the main object – Underground Railway System.)

Over all, London’s railway system, which started in 1863 (please put the data as a modifier), is the earliest system among all cities, started in 1863. Whereas ,whereas Los Angeles’ system was started in the 21st century. Besides the remaining railway systems were started in the 20th century.

Firstly, London’s railway route, with a length of 394 kilometers (data as modifier), is the longest route about 394 kilometers, whereas (word repetition: while) while Paris has half of that of London. Even though there is a lot of difference in opend opening date for Tokyo and Washington DC, there is only 29 kilometres difference in route about 155 and 126 respectively (mention both kilometers OR mention the difference – 29 kilometers). The remaining cities Kyoto and Los Angeles have very small route approximately 11 and 28 kilometres. (Please mention that Kyoto has the least route length.)

Secondly, Tokyo, with 1927 million travellers, has the highest number of passengers about 1927 millions, even though, it was started after the London, it (One pronoun in a sentence can refer to one noun only. While the first it refers to Tokyo, the second it refers to London.) has only less than half of the Tokyo’s number. The number of people who travel through in Paris railways is almost 9 times greater than to that of Washington DC (Good Comparison!). Finally, Kyoto and Los Angeles, which support 45 million and 50 million travellers respectively, have nearly equal number of passengers travel through them with 45 millions and 50 millions respectively.

Please understand the right placement of NUMBERS. Try placing them as MODIFIERS. Bands = 6.0

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