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IELTS Academic Task 1 Correction: Children’s Charity in the U.S.A.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the U.S.A spent and received in 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Please go through the SAMPLE ANSWER as well.

Answer:

The given pie charts illustrate the categories of expenditures as well as sources to make of revenue for an American’s children American children’s charity in 2007. (Note: In introduction, you must write the UNITS – dollars, number of people, percentage, etc. The given pie charts illustrate the percentage share of various sources of revenue and expenditure along with total collection and spending in dollars for an American children’s charity during 2007.)

Overall, food donations contributed the biggest share in charity sources while (good connector) the least revenue was generated by government’ grants. The largest and least percentage of charity money was spent on program services and management respectively. (Perfect!)

In revenue generation, exactly 86.6% percent (about 86 percent) money was collected by food donations (did food donations collect the money?) followed by community donations, which were about one tenth of total collections whereas program revenue shared a minor proportion of about 2.2% in this regard(This sentence is too long. Make it short.) In revenue generation, community donations, with 86.6 percent share (mention data using a modifier), contributed the most to revenue generation. This (cohesion) was followed by community donations, which ………

By donating a very low grant, American government has shown little interest in this campaign. (Oops! Can’t mention your opinion in task 1. Please be objective and restrict yourself to main features and comparisons.) Investment income and government donation contributed negligibly (main feature) to the charity’s revenue.

The biggest expense of about 96% percent was program services by charity (Active voice: The charity’s biggest expense (main feature) was in program services, which consumes 96 percent of its total expenses of about dollars 53 million (explain the main feature using a modifier). This (cohesion) was followed by…….) followed by fundraising and management and general expenses which were exactly 2.6% and 1.6% respectively. At the end of year, charity gathered a surplus of $336,684, showing successful management (Can’t write this. Restrict yourself to main festures and comparisons) of this campaign.

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