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IELTS Essay Correction: Intelligent Forms on Other Planets.

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Some scientists think that there are intelligent forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think that it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Please go through SAMPLE ANSWER as well.

Answer:

The  presence of extra-terrestrial intelligence (ETI) in on other planets and galaxy galaxies has been a contentious issue since the development birth of human endeavour for space exploration. While some space researchers believe that these intelligent forms should be communicated contacted (OR While some space researchers believe that humans should communicate with these ….) for the development of science, others oppose this view and argue that such communication would be harmful to lives on the Earth.

Mention the reasons supporting both opinions in the introduction: Some space researchers believe that these intelligent forms should be contacted since they can help us prevent natural calamities. Others think 

It is believed by some space explorers that contact with ETI would bring benefits to people on Earth. According to them, one of the benefits would be getting advice in avoiding the natural catastrophy catastrophies. Even though, satellite communications provides our scientists and weather telecasters about  the information on imminent catastrophies such as a tsuami, an earthquake and so on, nothing much preventable (preventable = avoidable) could be implemented no concrete steps have been taken to avoid these mishaps. Therefore, many  scientists believe that unless and untill super intelligent advice is sought, these disasters can not be mitigated and they encourage to contact with alien life forms. (The idea is crazy but well-presented.)

Despite the above argument, majority of other space explorers suggest that contacts with alien life forms could be hazardous. As per them, these ETI would cause intentional or unintentional hazards ranging from enslaving and eating the living things to causing life -threatening infections on the Earth (perfect parallelism!). Undoubtedly, the living oraganism in on the Earth are have never been (never necessitates have been OR write – are neither accustomed to nor vaccinated for ….) accustomed to and vaccinated for the new potential diseases that can be caused by aliens and these diseases might may bring outbreaks of epidemics, which might will (The tense should be FUTURE.) be new challange to the medical technology science. ,in Earth. These threats caused by ETI would may vanish the lives all living creatures on Earth.

In conclusion, fortunately, continuing space expeditions always brings positive impacts on human lives. However, in my opinion, the search for new life forms in on other planets and contacts should be taken with precautions as the scientists are unaware of the nature of these aliens until now(do they know now?)

Note: 1. The introduction can be improved. 2. Articles mistakes. 3. Some L.R. issues. Try using better words and prevent word repetitions. 4. Tenses. Bands = 6.5 to 7.0. 

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