The given pie charts illustrate the fluctuations in yearly expenditures of a specific British school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. (perfect! All points covered concisely.)
Overall, a major part of the school’s budget was allocated to wages while the least part was given to insurance policy. A significant portion of this budget was divided between resources and furniture.
Teacher’s salaries increased significantly, by 10 percent, in first ten years followed by a marginal decrease
, of about 5 percent , (no commas needed) in last ten years. The percentage of other worker’s salaries dropped gradually , by 6 percent , (no commas needed) from 1981 to 1991 and further fell consistently , by 7 percent , from 1991 to 2001.
In two decades (which two?), the percentage expense of resources gradually rose
, by 5 percent, followed by a dramatic fall , by 11 percent, of 11 percent (OR fell by 11 percent) while furniture expenses fell suddenly , by 10 percent , before being rocketed up , by 18 percent , . Thus both showed an opposite trend to each other (while is sufficient to express contrast). The school’s insurance policy fares cost/ expenditure/ spending rose slowly , by 1 percent , (during?) followed by a sudden rise , became four times to their starting value, in initial and final decade respectively. It witnessed a four fold increase from 1981 to 2001.
Pargraphs are well structured. Right comparisons and main features. Do not over-use commas. Punctuation and a few sentence structuring issues. Bands = 6.5 to 7.0.
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