The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Please read the sample answer as well. SAMPLE ANSWER
The bar chart gives information about Scotland’s exports, which were measured in billions of pounds, by nine different categories in 2014. (You wrote better than me!)
Clearly, exports to the rest of the world were greater than to the UK with the exception of electrical and instrument engineering. (good job!)
The Scotland’s main source of export from Scotland to the rest of the World was the business and finance, restaurants and hotels services, at 13.8 billion pounds, which is almost seven times more than the exports (which exports? All or only this industry?) to the rest of the UK.
Services to business, finance, restaurants and hotels exports to rest of the world was 13.8 billion pounds, which was seven times higher than the (refers to business, finance, restaurants, and hotels) industry’s exports to rest of the UK. (If you’re making a comparison, choose a subject that is common in both domains. You sentence’s subject is “Scotland’s main exports”. This subject is not suitable to make a comparison.)
The second largest source of export to the world was
in the chemicals and minerals sector at 9.5 billion pounds and this was followed by wholesale and retail, other manufacturing, (Oxford comma. Read rule 1 in this article to understand the usage of this comma.) and food and drinks, 8.2, 5.9, 5.8 and 5 billion pounds respectively (Do not worry about stating the data at all places. The question is on main features and comparisons. Not data.). The rest of the exports to the world costed contributed less than 5 billion pounds, and the least popular area exporting industry (exports is not same as popular) was engineering with a number of 2.3 billion pounds. When we look at the exports to the UK, chemical and mineral products, with 5 billion exports, had the largest share of exports to rest of the UK at 5 billion pounds. This sector was followed by food and drinks at 4.4 billion pounds and engineering with 4 billion pounds. Rest of the sectors accounted for less than 3 billion pounds.
Good attempt at making sense of this complex, data-heavy question. Just a few sentence structuring issues. Focus less on data. It is designed to confuse a student. A few L.R issues. Bands = 6.5.
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