IELTS Academic Task 1 Correction: Price Per Kilometer of Clothing Imported into the European Union – 1.

The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Price per kilometer of clothing IELTS

20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Answer:

The bar graph depicts the price of clothing per kilometre, categorised according to the six countries imported from, in exported from six countries to the European Union in 1993 and 2003.

Clearly, while Argentina exported the most expensive clothing, the cheapest import was made from Bangladesh in these years. Furthermore, while China, India and Bangladesh increased (did China, India and Bangladesh increase price?) the average price, Argentina and Japan decreased (what decreased? Must have a referencing word.)Furthermore, while the average price of cloth exportes increased in China, India and Bangladesh, those (refers to cloth exports) form Argentina and Japan dropped, 

Imported material from Argentina costed (past form of verb cost is costcost from Argentia was just less than 30 pounds in 1993 and marginally declined to slightly over 25 pounds in 2003, while these figures encountered the same payment at about 27 pounds for Brazil in these years those from Brazil were …….(Use a subject that becomes common for both Argentina and Brazil: The imported material cost from Argentina …….., while that/those from Brazil ………) Please add one sentence for Japan as well.

Import value for clothes from China experienced a gradual rise from 10 pounds in 1993 to approximately 17 pounds in 2003. Although, India and Bangladesh experienced a considerable growth in the prices, which ranged between 7-12 7 to 12 pounds for India in 1993 (this is not 1993. This is 1993 and 2003 for India) and 3-6 3 to 6 pounds for Bangladesh in 2003 respectively (respectively will not work for India and Bangladesh since one is in the main sentence and other is in modifier.), these numbers were slightly lower than those of China.

Only Brazil had no change in terms of the cost of the imported clothes, which was roughly 23 pounds in these years.

This essay suffers from sentence structuring issues. Please structure the sentence in a manner that the numbers are correctly linked to the countries.

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