IELTS Academic Task 1 Correction: Price per Kilometer of Clothing Imported into the European Union.

The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

The bar chart compares the cost per kilometer of importing clothes of clothing by kilometre from Argentina, Brazil, Japan, China, India and Bangladesh to the European Union in two different years.

It is clear that Argentina’s prices were the greatest, while Bangladesh’s were the lowest in both years. Also, China, India and Bangladesh were the countries that which managed to increase their sales (there is no data on sales. It’s price per pound) within this 10 years time. (Also, the price of cloth imports from China, India and Bangladesh incresed during this period.) (Also, China, India and Bangladesh witnessed an increase in price of cloth exports to the European Union.)

Argentina and Japan witnessed a fall in their import prices. The costs for Argentina‘s exports (Please use the correct subject. The cost is for exports, not for Argentina) started around 28 pounds per kilometre and dropped marginally to around 26 pounds, and in Japan the cost of Japan’s exports fell slightly from 15 to approximately 13 pounds with a similar decreasing trend (Use a fixed subject for both Argentina and Japan: The cost of cloth exports from Argintina ………, and THOSE (referencing) from Japan). The average price stayed constant in Brazil, at just around 23 pounds.

There was a dramatic rise in the prices of export in China, India and Bangladesh, began at 10 pounds, around 7 pounds, close to 5 pounds and went up just below 15 pounds, slightly more than 10 pounds and nearly 6 pounds respectively. (That’s three countries and six numbers. Placing them in the same sentence not only makes it unnecessarily complex, but also confusing to read. I can’t make out which number refers to which conuntry.)

There was a dramatic rise in the cloth export prices in China, India and Bangladesh. China’s export price increased from about 10 pounds to 17 pounds and India’s export price rose by 6 pounds during this priod. Bangladesh’s cloth export price doubled during this period.

Issues: IELTS people want you to write compound sentences and not data laden, complex sentences. Please maintian proper task response by reading the data carefully. Task 1 contains a lot of data. Do not try to write it using RESPECTIVELY. This will make things unnecessarily complex for the examiner to link countries (subject) with data (object). 

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