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IELTS Essay Correction: Travel Necessary to Learn About Other Nations – 3.

Some people think that travel is necessary to learn about other nations. Others, however, think that TV and the Internet are the best ways to learn about other countries. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

There is an opinion that tourism is essential to learn about other countries while according to some, electronic and social media are excellent alternative ways to learn about cultures. Travelling to different countries provides an ample opportunity opportunities to learn keenly about various cultures (please mention HOW it helps). Whereas, TV channels and YouTube videos signify (they can’t signify. They can present.) main cultural and traditional attractions around the world.

Tourist activities are an excellent way to explore multicultural impacts in different countries since it provides a tourist with not only a chance to have personally experience the places but also an (parallelism) opportunity to learn about various aspects of any locale (….. learn about any locale’s numerous aspects such as …..) such as clothing sense, language, mannerism and beliefs. For example, according to an International survey held in New York in 2015, (no comma here) about fifty percent of adoption of unique African hair styles by Americans is solely attributed to tourism. (you can develop better task response by writing: ….. out of all the Americans who visit Africa every year, more than 50 percent get inspired from the continent’s fashion and adopt unique African hair styles.)

Tv Television channels and social media platforms play a significant role in portraying an image about any country‘s norms and way of life because they highlight the main attractions or any unique feature of a country in an eloquent way. For instance, about 80 percent of Aljazeera viewers voted that they get to know learned about Tandora Dance, which is a typical Middle East type of dance, because the channel had telecasted it. (Excellent example!) You can write one more sentence in this paragraph to explain the idea.

In conclusion, both tourism and electronic media can serve as a means of learning about customs of different countries. I strongly believe that tourism has an upper hand over channel telecasting because personal travelling can provide a broader option to experience any locale essence and appreciate its traditional colours.

Total Words = 255. 

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