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IELTS Academic Task 1 Correction: Survey of Adult Education – 1.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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Please go through the Sample Answer as well.

Answer:

The bar chart illustrates the various reasons cited by young adults why they want to study for pursuing adult education (Prefer not to raise a question. Mention complete terms. Not partial “What study?” ) and pie chart suggests how the cost of study should be divided .

Overall, it is safe to say that the majority of adults prefer to study for pursuing the better degree interest in a subject (Do not change the terms mentioned in the question beyond recognition. You can make only minor alterations that do not change their meaning. “pursuing for better degree” is very different from “interest in subject”.) and majority of course fees should be beared borne (past form of verb bear is borne) by individual himself.

Getting back to the details, that (The statements like getting back to the details and it is safe to say that promote redundancy. These statements do not make much sense.) the major proportion of adults, almost 40%, cited that they want to study further because they want to achieve higher degree and they like to study their subjects (You’ve mixed two different reasons. Please keep them separate. Please go through the sample answer to understand how the two are connected.). On the another hand (These are not opposite. No need of “on the other hand”) around one fifth of individuals quote the reasons that further study will help them in current job as well as in getting promotion (parallelism issue). A similar percentage of people of this age (no age mentioned in the question. All those who are above 18 are adults.) cited that they enjoy learning. Almost one in ten student of this age group thinks (no mention of students or age group) adults pursue further study since it gives more job options and will provides a platform where he they can interact with other people (These people are only 9 percent, not 20 percent.).

According to pie chart a major portion of fees, 40% percent, should be paid by student an individual himself while current employer should give around one third of total cost of fees. Finally, one fourth of total expenditure on joining the course should come by from taxpayer’s money.

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