These charts give data on the destination of U.K graduates and post-graduates (excluding full-time work) for the year 2008.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar charts present information about the number of British graduates and post-graduates with their (these are not preferences)
preferences, beside besides full-time working students, (they are not students.) in the year 2008. (Beside vs Besides: Beside is a preposition that means “next to”. Besides refers to “except”, “in addition to”.) (The introduction suffers from a poor lexical resource. You’ve wrongly used THREE words. Sample: The given bar chart presents information about the number of British graduates and post-graduates engaged in part-time employment, voluntary work and further study as well as those who are unemployed in the year 2008.)
Overall, the figure
of for graduate students is ten times more than that of for post-graduate students. The Both categories of students of both sides (Categories is a better word than sides. Need to use right words. Lexical Resource.) showed a similar trend of preferences with the maximum students opted further education while the minimum students did voluntary work in the given period.
With about 30,000 students, the majority of graduates preferred further studies followed by those who engaged themselves in part-time work and those who remained unemployed. The least number of students, with a figure of 3500, showed interest in doing voluntary work. (Good job! Good use of modifiers to connect number with main features.)
The largest number of post-graduate students preferred pursuing higher education followed by those who did part-time work to support themselves financially. The unemployed population, with about 1600 individuals, remained third on the list. With just under 350 students, the least
strength number of post-graduates served as volunteer workers. (Good job!)
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