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IELTS Essay Correction: Sports Professionals Earn a Great Deal More Money Than People in Other Professions.

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Successful sportmen make much more money than other professionals. It is considered by many that they deserve their monetary reward, but some find it irrational. While it is true that sports is a significant form of entertainment and is a huge industry in itself, other professionals such as doctors, engineers and humanitarians should be paid more too. In this essay, we will discuss both sides and why other professions should be given more importance.

Please discuss the right structure with me. While some people opine that this is justified since this encourages youngsters to stay healthy and fit, others think this is unfair as other professionals make equal contribution towards society. I strongly believe that ……..

The fan base of sports clubs (a sports club) is insanely huge. Sports is an established form of entertainment as people not only spend their time, energy and money in watching and playing games but also are actually emotionally attached to with them (subject = sports) it. Because of this, successful sports professionals are paid a massive amount of money so that they keep playing or and keep entertaining the masses. For example, David Beckham, a footballer, is paid millions of pounds and is a loved celebrityFor example, more than ten million Europeans take a break from work and watch the Euro Cup every year. Consequently, football stars such as Messi and Rooney and paid astronomical sums of money to entertain the people.

However, other professionals work as hard as sportspersons to contribute much more to the society. For example, doctors spend more than a decade to get earn their degree and work day and night to serve the people. Furthermore, engineers are responsible for all the technological advancements. In addition, humanitarians uplift the life of those in need. Certainly, the contributions of these professionals are more meaningful to the society and are more important for the survival of humanity than those of sportspersons. Consequently, they should be rewarded as much as the sports stars. (Make a comparison with sportspersons.) They are the heroes of the real world and should be rewarded and respected. (Of course, they are rewarded and respected. Compare with sports people.)

In conclusion, in my opinion, it is not fair that sportsmen make a fortune while other professionals do not. Professionals contributing to the betterment of the society should be rewarded equally or even more than those who merely entertain them. (Conclusion is fine.)

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