These days free music and free films are available online. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.
40 minutes, 250 words at least.
Note the use of cohesive devices and collocations in the answer.
Introduction: (Introduce the topic and STATE your opinion. MENTION the reasons supporting your opinion)
With the widespread availability (collocation) of the Internet and smartphones, free music and films are readily accessible (collocation) to everyone (WITH X, Y construction – cohesion). I think this has numerous negative consequences (collocation) since (cohesion) the people lose focus on important issues and the entertainment industry suffers heavy losses (collocation).
Body Paragraph 1: (EXPLAIN idea 1: lose focus on important issues)
With the easy and free availability of these sources of entertainment, people tend to spend more time watching the videos and listening to the audio (WITH X, Y construction – cohesion). They (referencing) often engage in these (referencing) activities during office hours or while cooking food at home. This (cohesion) reduces the economic productivity (collocation) of the people and curtails their social engagement (note parallelism – reduces, curtails). For example (cohesion), A recent Google study revealed that most youngsters in the age group of 22 to 30 watch free Youtube movies and music during peak business hours from 10 am to 5 pm. This reduced the economic output (collocation) the youngsters can produce.
Body Paragraph 2: (EXPLAIN idea 2: heavy losses for the industry)
Moreover (cohesion), free availability of movies and music leads to lesser revenue for the industry and this (cohesion) may also result in losses. Various newly released films (collocation) can be easily downloaded (collocation) through pirate websites for free and people watch them without paying anything to the producers. This (cohesion) leads to heavy loss (collocation) of revenue. For example (cohesion), a survey has pointed out the music industry has lost 90 percent of its revenue in the last decade due to (X due to Y; cohesion) the replacement of compact discs with online free media.
Conclusion: (Conclude the essay with future)
In conclusion (cohesion), the availability of free films and music has adversely affected (collocation) the industry economically and distracted people from important tasks. If a solution to this problem is not found, the society will pay a heavy economic and social price. (IF, THEN construction – cohesion)
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