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IELTS Essay Correction: Social, Medical and Technical Problems Associated with the Use of Mobile Phones.

There are social, medical and technical problems associated with the use of mobile phones. What forms do they take? Do you agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of mobile phones? 

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

The mobile phone usage has brought with it disturbances in social, medical and technical aspects like lessened social interactions, abnormal brain development, and hacking incidences respectively. I strongly believe that the negative aspects of mobile phone usage are more than the positive ones.

The disadvantages of using cell phones are evident in our daily lives. Firstly, social interactions in the form of gatherings or outdoor games have decreased significantly as chatting with a distant friend on a mobile consumes all our time. One study points out that youngsters spend more time on social media websites such as Facebook on their smartphones than on personal one-on-one interaction. Secondly, the overuse of medical devices may also result in serious medical ailments. Scientists, for instance, have already found clues and warned as that early exposure (exposure is not early) to radiation coming from mobiles may cause abnormalities in the growing brain of children or may even cause cancer. Lastly, even though mobile banking is one of the facilities the device has provided us, it also has invited numerous hacking incidences. Only last year, in Nepal, more than 500 cases of mobile banking error due to hacking were reported.

Owing to the problems stated above, I am of the opinion that mobile phones do more harm than good. Even though mobile phones has have eased connecting with friends and family around the globe, the world was absolutely fine when these devices were not invented. For instance, I grew up in the 1990s when mobile phones were not popular. I went to the school, played with my friends on the field and spent time with my family, and I grew up perfectly fine without any problems. I was never disturbed by unnecessary calls or messages and I never worried about looking good on pictures that were to be posted on social media sites. Hence, the phone we carry 24 hours a everyday is actually a burden rather than a useful accessory.

In conclusion, having mobile phones causes problems in multiple aspects of life which suggests that its disadvantages are greater than its advantages.

In conclusion, having mobile phones causes problems in multiple aspects of life which suggests that its disadvantages are greater than its advantages. If the use of mobile phones is curtailed, several psychological, physical, and social problems will be reduced appreciably. 

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