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IELTS Answer Correction: Leisure Activities in Australia – 4.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of children from 5 to 14 years of age in selected leisure activities in Australia.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

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20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Answer:

The bar chart illustrates the indulgence (the chart does not illustrate indulgence but the percent of boys and girls indulged in different activities.) of girls and boys from 5 to 14 years of age in 5 different leisure activities (Skateboarding, bike riding, watching TV/videos, electronic/computer games(Oxford comma before and) and art and craft) in Australia. The values are expressed in percentages.

Overall, the favorite (If they are involved in an activity, it does not become their favourite. Stay objective in task 1. Overall, all boys and girls engage in watching television or videos.) pastime for both the genders is watching TV/videos. More number A greater percentage of boys take part in rest of the activities except for art and craft in which girls outnumber (there is no mention of numbers in the question) boys.

Clearly, all the children irrespective of gender watch TV/videos as the bar diagram shows 100% participation(no need to write this. Moreover, you’ve stated this information earlier as well.)

The percentage of boys participating in 3 out of 5 activities exceeds that of girls. Following watching TV/Videos, boys prefer electronic/computer games as about 80% play these games as opposed to about 60% in case of girls. Similarly, more than 70% and about 40% of boys partake in bike riding and skate boarding/rolle-blading respectively while more or less 10% of girls have less interest in these sports. (This paragraph should be on boys only and the next should be on girls only. There is not much scope to write comparisons. Remember the question states: “MAIN features and make comparisons where RELEVANT.”)

On the contrary, almost 60% of girls spend their time doing art and craft which is more than 20% higher than the participation of boys.

Evidently, a greater percentage of boys indulge in physical activities such as skateboarding and bike riding than girls. Also, about 80 percent of boys play computer games as compared to around 60 percent of girls. On the other hand, a greater percentage of girls are involved in art and craft than boys. However, all girls and boys watch television during leisure time. (Comparison Paragraph)

All boys engage in watching television, followed by playing computer games, riding a bike and skateboarding. Only about 30 percent are involved in arts and crafts. Girls, on the other hand, prefer watching television followed by an equal percent engaged in bike riding and computer games. While about 60% engage in art and craft, only 25 percent participate in skateboarding. (Individual Paragraph)

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