The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
20 minutes, 150 words at least.
Please read the sample answer HERE.
pie chart illustrates pie-charts illustrate the proportion of the population for the year 2000 and presenting (this is naturally connected to illustrate.) the future count of people in 2050 for the countries Yemen and Italy. Overall, (This is not an overall statement.) in Yemen, the population count for 0-14 years is almost half of the total . W , whereas, in Italy, the same generation count is only 14.3% of the total in the year 2000. In Italy, the maximum number of people lived in Italy (you’ve already mentioned the country) are an age group between 15-59 are 61.6% (1) and Yemen count for same is 46.3% and . The lowest percentage of living people are 60+years at 3.6% for the year 2000 (for which country?). However, projections for the future year 2050 are quite different.
Let us pause here and observe a few things. You’ve decided to build the above paragraph for the year 2000 and the next one for the year 2050. Make sure that the THEME of the paragraph (year or country) is written in the beginning. That is, it is the year 2000, begin the paragraph with In 2000. If it is country, begin the paragraph with In Yemen (As I’ve done in the sample answer). This will eliminate the need for repeating the theme (year or theme).
1. The question asks for MAIN FRATURES and COMPARISONS. You need not write numbers everywhere. If you’ve written a FEATURE (maximum, minimum), you can comfortably avoid writing the number. This will not impact your score.
In the year 2000, most of Yemen’s population was in the age group of 0 to 14, while most of Italy’s population was in the age group of 15 to 59.
Note: I’ve used year in the beginning. I don’t need to repeat the year in the entire paragraph now. The THEME of the sentence is “most of the people” and I’ve written this for both countries. Please note that I’ve changed the year according to the most population. Let us now assume that you want to keep the AGE GROUP as the theme. The sentence will be as follows:
In the year 2000, people in age group 0-14 constituted most of the population in Yemen and they formed 46 percent of the total population in Italy.
Let me write one paragraph for you. Note the THEME of each sentence. Maintaining the same theme is crucial to make the right comparisons.
In the year 2000, most of (theme) Yemen’s population was in the age group of 0 to 14, while most of Italy’s population was in the age group of 15 to 59. The least percentage (theme) of the population of Yemen was in the age group 60 and above and those in Italy were in the group 0-14. (the rest of the population) Those in 15 to 59 formed 46 percent of Yemen’s population and 60 and above people formed 24 percent of Italy’s population.
In Yemen, 60+years population will see an increase of 2.1%,
youngsters (which age group?) the percentage/ proportion of people in 0-14 age group ratio (ratio is very different from percentage) will decrease from 50.1% to 37.0% , t . There will be a dramatic rise of almost 10% higher in the age group of 15 to 59 in 2050. (2) While in Italy, 60+ 60 years and above age group (age can’t see a surge. “Age group” can.) will see a surge in number by almost double in 2000, (years can’t plummet) 0-14years will witness plummet of 3.2% and 15-59 group will decrease by 20% by 2050. (You’ve tried to rush through a lot of things. Let me restructre this sentence. In Italy, the proportion of people (subject) in the age group 60 (object) and above will double from 2000 to 2050 (time) and those (refer back to subject) in the group 0-14 years (object change) will plummet by 3.2% (Time obvious). Those (refer back to subject) in the age group 15-59 (object change) will decrease by 20 percent during this period (time).) – Please note the organisation of content.
Oops! You had followed a different structure in the previous paragraph.
Body Paragraph 1: Year – Age group – compare both countries.
Body Paragraph 2: Year – Country – All age groups.
Maintain the same structure for both paragraphs. Organised content will fetch more bands.
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