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IELTS Academic Task 1 Correction: Employment Rates In Six Countries.

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.

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20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Answer:

The given graph demonstrates the proportion of working rate for (proportion = rate) men and women for 6 countries namely Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, UK, New Zealand, and the USA, for the period 1995 and 2005.

Overall, the male employment rate is higher for these two years. Whereas female service employment rate has increased 2005. (You’ve tried to use a synonym service in place of employment. However, they are not the same. Do not use a synonym that does not convey the same message as the original word.)

In Australia, the female employment rate was at 28% in 1995, which showed a 10% increase in 2005. Their counterpart (which counterpart? The meaning is not clear.) Male employment rate was were at 57% in 1995, it showed steady rise of 12% in 2005. Iceland has (stick to the past tense only) witnessed the highest male working male service rate as compared to other countries at 71% in 1995 and 83% in 2005, Women were almost half in 1995 of their counterpart in 2005 The percentage of working women was almost half that of the males in both years. UK, (UK is different) the USA and New Zealand appears to be had the same employment rate for men in 2005 at around 71%. On the contrary, UK and USA working women proportion is was the same 62% for 2005. Switzerland has had the highest ratio of working women for 1995 and 2005 at 56% and 68%.

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