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IELTS Essay September 2018: No Longer Necessary To Use Animals For Food, Clothing Or Medicine.

In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Introduction: (Introduce the topic with a general statement and MENTION your opinion.)

The technological advancements (collocation) in agriculture, pharmaceuticals, and clothing have drastically reduced (collocation) our dependence on nature. I think we do not need to use animals for these (referencing) purposes as viable and ethical alternatives (collocation) are available.

Body Paragraph 1: (Explain alternatives in food)

Humans have numerous alternatives (collocation) to animals in the food industry. We have consumed animals for several millenniums (collocation) for crucial intake (collocation) of proteins and to ensure our survival. With the abundant availability (collocation) of food grains, vegetables, and pulses, we do not need to consume them (referencing) for our existence. Also (cohesion), we have enough vegetable-based products such as (cohesion) pulses and soya milk that are rich in protein. We do not need animal milk or meat for this (referencing) purpose.

Body Paragraph 2: (Explain alternatives in pharmaceuticals)

Moreover (cohesion), humans used animals such as (cohesion) snakes for making medicines in the past. Their (referencing) poison was used to make sedatives that reduced pain. With the development of artificial chemicals (collocation) such as antibiotics we do not need to exploit these (referencing) creatures for extracting natural chemicals (collocation). The synthetic (artificial) chemicals (collocation) are, in fact, more effective in reducing pain and treating diseases than (cohesion – more X than Y) the compounds derived from animals.

Body Paragraph 2: (Explain alternatives in the remaining area – clothing)

Furthermore (cohesion), we have used animals for manufacturing clothes and shoes for several centuries (collocation). For example (cohesion), we reared sheep for wool which (cohesion) was used to make warm clothes. In many cases, animals were killed for their skin as it (referencing) kept humans warm during extreme weather events (collocation). However (cohesion), during the past few decades, we have developed clothes made of artificial materials (collocation) ranging from plastics to vegetable fibre (cohesion – from X to Y) which (cohesion) are more warm and soft than (cohesion – more X than Y) the natural materials (collocation). Consequently (cohesion), we no longer need to exploit animals for manufacturing clothes.

Conclusion:

In conclusion (cohesion), I strongly believe (collocation) that humans do not need to exploit animals for any purpose. We have already developed (collocation) strong and more efficient alternatives (collocation). Rather (cohesion), we need to respect their right to live freely (collocation).

Total Words = 276.

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