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IELTS General Task 1 Correction: A Music Concert Ticket.

You bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:

Explain the concert

Why you are unable to go

How can your friend receive the ticket.

20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Answer:

Dear Poonam,

How are you? Hope I hope your college is going well (Do not write a sentence without a subject. This is called a fragment sentence. You will lose bands for this.). It’s It has (do not use contractions.) been a while since we last talked as exams are around. Actually, I have a music concert ticket, if you are interested to go and get a little break from your hectic schedule. (Even if she is not interested, you still have the ticket. Right? The use of ‘IF’ is incorrect.) 

“I know that you love music and I have a perfect gift for you – a music concert ticket.” OR “I have a music concert ticket and, I am sure, it will offer a perfect break during the exams.”

Like every year, the city community center has organized a music concert this year too and guess who the performers are? (Let us keep the statement and the question separate.) Every year the city community center organizes a music concert. You will be surprised to know about this year’s performers. It’s (They are) Arijit Singh and Neha Kakkar. I am well aware, that you are a great fan of both. Moreover, the concert is on this Saturday evening and you don’t do not have to worry to get up about getting up early the next day. (The right preposition with worry is about.)

I know you might be wondering why am I not going. The thing is that Yesterday I got slipped from the stairs and got swelling on my right foot. (Another way to write this: Unfortunately, after booking the ticket, I slipped from the stairs and I am unable to walk now.) The doctor has recommended complete bed rest for a week. I really felt disheartened as you know I am a big fan too. Anyway, you don’t do not have any problem collecting the ticket from my house, I suppose. Let me know your plans soon.

See you soon.

With love

S

Each point is adequately argued. There is ample scope to write better sentence structures. Do not use contractions in the IELTS exam (Essay, Task 1 – formal or informal).

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