A friend has written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem in the past. Write a reply to your friend. In your letter:
- Tell your friend you understand the problem.
- Explain what happened to you in the past
- Suggest possible solutions to the problem
20 minutes, 150 words at least.
I received your letter this morning and got to know that you are facing some issues at work
and would, therefore, . Since I have been through similar situations in my professional career, I would like to suggest some possible solutions. (Why would you like to suggest possible solutions? The question says that you’ve faced a similar problem. MENTION this in the introduction and EXPLAIN in a body paragraph.)
As you know, I
had (The use of past perfect tense is incorrect here.) joined a new company last year, and I was finding found it hard adjusting with the new work culture and my colleagues (1) , so . So, I can understand your the (1) situation and the stress you must be experiencing at the moment.
Please understand the right place to stop one sentence and begin the next. The paragraph above consisted of one sentence only and that sentence is more than 40 words long. That’s really long. The examiner will lose track of the message. Break it into easily digestible parts.
1. Violates parallelism. In former, MY is a pronoun and it has no parallel in the X part (X and Y). Colleagues is a noun and it is parallel to work culture. Similarly, the stress is not parallel to your situation. Your is a pronoun, the is an article.
, (no comma here. Correct construction is Although X, Y) it was a reputed company with a good client base, I was finding it difficult to work in a multicultural environment , (no comma here) since I was experiencing this type of environment for the first time. (2) Also, my colleagues were not so friendly, maybe because I was shy and didn’t interacted interact much with them.
2. There can be two types of constructions with SINCE. One involves a comma, the other does not. Since X, Y; X since Y. Keep this difference in mind while building a sentence.
I’d I would like to suggest that you try to be friendly and polite with all your co-workers because it will help you to settle in the new workplace quickly. Moreover, I would advise advice (advise is a verb, advice is a noun. Here you need to use a verb.) that you be patient and take your time till you get comfortable with the culture of your new company. Anyway, (3) I look forward to hearing from you soon.
3. Anyway seems strange here. It means “irrespective of what has been said earlier”. I guess that’s inappropriate here. You should write in a manner that invites the other person to seriously consider your proposition and reply. Something like: I eagerly look forward to your reply.
Numerous grammar mistakes (particularly punctuation) in the letter.
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